Hello all,
I need some help on analysing this poem that was submitted by les, geat poem by the way. I'm going to utilize it, but If anyone would like to add their perspective on it I would deeply appreciate it.

so heres the poem:-

Many feeble footsteps,
Follow me to where I stand,
Where happiness lie fields of green,
Where sorrow, desert sand.

Many roads I've taken,
Many paths I've crossed,
There's times I've been knee deep in sand,
And times when I've been lost.

My footsteps went through mountains,
And crossed through stormy seas,
My footsteps lead through hurricanes,
And passed through gentle breeze.

Though rain and hail may shower down,
And storms may come my way,
My footsteps are still perceivable,
Their image will forever stay.


Hidden

Many feeble footsteps,
(grammar error - there should be no comma above)
Follow me to where I stand,
Where happiness lie fields of green,
(makes no sense)
Where sorrow, desert sand.
(error - verb missing. scan is gonna be yucky)

Many roads I've taken,
Many paths I've crossed,
There's times I've been knee deep in sand,
(error - sb there are times)
And times when I've been lost.

My footsteps went through mountains,
And crossed through stormy seas,
(through? over maybe)
My footsteps lead through hurricanes,
And passed through gentle breeze.
(error - sb breezes, but rhyme-driven faux pas. too many 'throughs' anyhoo)

Though rain and hail may shower down,
And storms may come my way,
My footsteps are still perceivable,
Their image will forever stay.
-- Christopher Griffin