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Rivulets
Posted by: Silentponderer (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: June 19, 2004 09:34PM

May your love pour over me in rivulets of warm caresses
The sound of your voice telling me of the dangers of love
Warnings that water will burn your house, fire causes floods
A bizzaro world to come from your lips

And Iím intrigued.

The emotions as pure as the water flowing freely from the riverbed
That may I drink from if ever thirsty for virtue
With our hands entwined together as if they were originally one
But separated during the celebration of our births

When you are near, the separate warmth of your body
It makes me feel closer; that in love we are one, in mind we are semi
And in life we function as two. It is my honor to share this moment
To think of the sinews of our bodies lingering in sensations
long after the encounter is over.

~Time is standing still and we're just walking through it~


Re: Rivulets
Posted by: lg (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: June 19, 2004 09:43PM

Sp, I think you create some nice images. Good job. I particularly liked these lines:

The emotions as pure as the water flowing freely from the riverbed
That may I drink from if ever thirsty for virtue


Les


Re: Rivulets
Posted by: K.Q. (217.144.3.---)
Date: June 20, 2004 06:02AM

Beautiful. You are good. Amazing imagery and I love the way you invert the effect of

Warnings that water will burn your house, fire causes floods
A bizzaro world to come from your lips




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