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Scoring Goals
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: June 01, 2004 10:36PM

I was never a goal scorer,
But then the day came
A pail pastiche of a 13 year old
with winning on the brain
Drummed in by a portly master, whose failure
We contained.

I scored the winning goal, my only ever aim
Banana footed mistake, as it happens
Slight ankle pain,
Top corner volley Awarded and accepted
in the holy pouring rain.

That trophy did it, caused me to believe
In myself

Shone so brightly, illuminating promise
Teetering on mums mantle shelf
Invading such homely space,

What a perfect place, I thought
For such a fall from grace.


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: lg (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: June 01, 2004 11:57PM

I enjoyed the poem, Camus. But is this line:

it's not dark yet, but it's getting there

supposed to be there? It sounds out of place.


Les


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: Me! (---.ia2.marketscore.com)
Date: June 02, 2004 12:10AM

campus,
I coach a girl's softball team and have been pondering whether or not to give out "the most improved player" award. Thanks for making my mind up and hope this young lady benefits from it as much as you benefited from your trophy. I believe it's great, the little things that touch kids hearts. Thanks for the read!

Keep it simple!


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: June 02, 2004 11:54AM



Les, I think that line is Camus's signature...I think.

Great piece Camus, I don't recognise your name so, welcome to E-mule!


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 02, 2004 12:10PM

nICE....SOMETIMES THE HEART TAKES OVER WHEN THE MIND HESITATES!


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: November 27, 2004 04:13AM

I enjoyed the poem, Camus. But is this line:

it's not dark yet, but it's getting there

supposed to be there? It sounds out of place.


Les

Nice poem Kris,

Les,

the lines from Dylan, Kris copped it.

LOve,

Peter


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: November 27, 2004 04:32AM

Thanks, Peter, the broken lines before the signature really DO help.


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Les


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: November 27, 2004 06:46AM

Come on, it was my first post, way back when..................


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: K.Q. (194.165.154.---)
Date: November 27, 2004 03:51PM

Not my kind of ball, for subject matter. I dislike ball, but like the idea you embed within it!


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: November 27, 2004 04:00PM

Thanks KQ, it's a little embarrasing revisiting old poems, in my mind I've moved on, in others probably not............


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


Re: Scoring Goals
Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 14, 2012 12:25AM

bump




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