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Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)
Date: April 03, 2004 09:43AM

Searching Within

Among the four elements of life,
Earth is my nature.
Despite the vast dreamability
I am said to possess,
I find earth a scopeless horizon
To plunge my veins within.

Probing into its solidity,
I slither smoothly among its grains,
Like the delicate roots of
A mint plant, emitting reviving scents
Into the soils which carry my legacy.
Fertility of passion and wisdom flourishes.

Conscious of my plighting path,
I playfully scheme a surfacing exit
To exhale sunshine and rain.
Defying dangerous gravities,
My roots reach out to yet another
Sphere of horizons, more open to earth:

An upward grinding ground,
A downward scary sky,
A tomb to conceive a spirit,
A womb to burry a cloud,
An emulation of a declaration
To Live!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: April 03, 2004 02:34PM

I liked this one K. Q. , especially this:

I find earth a scopeless horizon
To plunge my veins within.


Les


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (217.144.13.---)
Date: April 04, 2004 01:55AM

Thanks ,Les. I appreciate your taking the time to read!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)
Date: April 05, 2004 08:11AM

Sorry to impose, but I was hoping for more comments. This was written very spontaneously and I wonder what you think. I am trying to compare my works!
Thanks!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Cad (---.strl1201.mi.comcast.net)
Date: April 05, 2004 09:33PM

K.Q.,

I enjoyed. The idea seemed to me slightly vague and obscure at first, but I've read this numerous times now and I think I understand what you're going for.

I enjoy mostly how the words the speaker uses to describe himself change in varying 'elements' of earthly nature. ("I slither smoothly among its grains", "I playfully scheme a surfacing exit", "To exhale sunshine and rain", "My roots reach out to yet another") I think THIS was the central idea in the poem, at least for me and what I got from it- the physcial nature of one's mental cyclings.

Cad


Re: Reflections
Posted by: J.H.SUMMERS (---.chartertn.net)
Date: April 05, 2004 09:53PM

K.Q.,

I like this. You have some good imagery working here. The flow is even and your word choices are good.

john


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Adler (210.10.106.---)
Date: April 06, 2004 04:00AM


Though I felt I was missing something at time of reading, the rich use of language once again inspired me to swim through it again. nice K.Q


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (217.144.10.---)
Date: April 08, 2004 10:48AM

Thanks a lot , John and Adler for taking the time to read and respond. I appreciate your comments.

Cad , I loved the phrase you used:"the physcial nature of one's mental cyclings". I think you have captured the essence of my theme. I am also flattered by your having read the poem more than once. Thanks!!! I value your effort!
p.s. the speaker in this poem is me!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: TheNolon (---.191.182.233.stp.wi.charter.com)
Date: April 01, 2005 02:28PM

sad smiley( spammers go away.....

Wow an amazing poem. Fav read of the day. Your views and ways of weaving around these words with such expression of this plant and how it ahh great read. Enjoyed this much. Nice work. ..



*grabs a knife and starts ripping up these bots and the idiots who brought them here. *

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: Reflections
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: April 01, 2005 03:38PM

K.Q., I think i'm more of an "air" person.


Les


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (213.186.178.---)
Date: April 01, 2005 03:43PM

Nolon, thanks for reading. I appreciate your kind words.

Les, I think I agree, as "air" you do capture scents!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: April 01, 2005 04:05PM

Les, I thought you were more of a "wind" person smiling smiley


Re: Reflections
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: April 01, 2005 04:07PM

Les, I thought you were more of a "wind" person

I think you've got me confused with Jean-Paul.


Les


Re: Reflections
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: April 01, 2005 04:26PM

He'd charm them with his smile
but now he is chagrined
he used to break their hearts
now all he breaks is wind


Re: Reflections
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.hsd1.ca.comcast.net)
Date: April 10, 2005 12:59AM

earth mint
rises at dusk
raises our sense


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (212.38.148.---)
Date: May 02, 2005 05:30PM

why is it that my poems are targetted with these spammers? I don;t get it??!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Desi (---.adsl.proxad.net)
Date: May 03, 2005 07:16PM

not only yours. I'm removing them from all over the place as soon as I can. I'm sorry, wasn't able to do so the previous two days due to househunting.


Re: Reflections
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: May 03, 2005 07:20PM

why is it that my poems are targetted with these spammers? I don;t get it?

They like you. No too flip.

Actually, I think they target anyone who won't over-react. Jack, you, and me.


Les


Re: Reflections
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.hsd1.ca.comcast.net)
Date: May 03, 2005 08:00PM

Your double directioned 'para-doxes' speak a unique mind.

btw burry shoulc be bury

Peter


Re: Reflections
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: May 03, 2005 08:31PM

Burry used to make a fine chocolate chip cookie called Mr Chips


Re: Reflections
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.hsd1.ca.comcast.net)
Date: May 03, 2005 09:11PM

That was the flying burryto brothers, Johnny


Re: Reflections
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: May 03, 2005 09:35PM

I'd have remembered that if not for the Doobie Brothers


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (---.118.31.34.ua.batelco.jo)
Date: May 04, 2005 07:45AM

Thanks Peter.

johnny, I do enjoy your sense of humor !


Re: Reflections
Posted by: spaz (---.180.169.56.fdl.wi.charter.com)
Date: May 05, 2005 07:01PM

To exhale sunshine and rain.

Excellent. Good read. Delicious. SPAZ


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q (202.88.172.---)
Date: May 07, 2005 09:42AM

nice poetry,original. nice images


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Gwydion (---.bchsia.telus.net)
Date: May 07, 2005 10:42AM


Author: K.Q (202.88.172.---)
Author: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)

will the real KQ step forward...

Author: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)

don't know who the other KQ is but I believe,

something is going on.
KQ's threads are spammed (as are a few other poets) and Coin claims he's receiving hate mail.

What up?


Gwyd


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Coin (---.range81-154.btcentralplus.com)
Date: May 07, 2005 10:45AM


Gwyd

My hate mail has stopped but I am still receiving very strange shopping tips.

I noticed K.Q's posts too, Stem?

Coin
"Try your wings"


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Gwydion (---.bchsia.telus.net)
Date: May 07, 2005 10:49AM

well good, at least the hate mail has stopped...



Post Edited (05-07-05 10:05)


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (212.38.148.---)
Date: May 07, 2005 05:02PM

This is getting stranger !! I didn't post that last one! I too wonder, Gwyn!


Re: Reflections
Posted by: jerrygarner7 (---.lax.untd.com)
Date: May 23, 2005 01:04AM

Mother Nature gets erotic!
Graciously so, but still erotic


Re: Reflections
Posted by: stem (210.18.156.---)
Date: May 26, 2005 09:31AM

a Poem filled with striking lines. Each lines has its own beauty. great poetry
stem


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Naked Lady (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: May 26, 2005 12:41PM

"An upward grinding ground,
A downward scary sky,
A tomb to conceive a spirit,
A womb to burry a cloud,
An emulation of a declaration
To Live!"


wow, I loved those lines. I am the water sort though I commune eternally with my counter earth, my solar opposite...

The poem made me think of worms and zodiac lol Very well written though and I enjoyed it. Unique is always impressive.


ambassador in chains


Re: Reflections
Posted by: K.Q. (212.38.148.---)
Date: May 27, 2005 12:13PM

Thanks Jennifer , stem, and NL. I appreciate your reading.


Re: Reflections
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: August 02, 2006 02:53AM

bump


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Christy (192.168.128.---)
Date: August 02, 2006 12:53PM

Khalida...I went to the beach this weekend with my sister and a girlfriend...and in one of our talks, I brought up how we used to plant mint when we were little and how we enjoyed chewing on the leaves. My sister told me she tried planting some in her yard when she first got married, and soon found out that mint will grow and take over a yard because of its extensive root system...so once again, we have one of those little cross-over moments, even though this poem was written a couple of years ago. Your use of the mint plant was most appropriate.
I love it!

Where are you? I haven't seen you posting lately...hope everything is okay.

Christy

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 08/02/2006 12:53PM by Christy.


Re: Reflections
Posted by: Brucefur (192.168.128.---)
Date: August 02, 2006 02:26PM

Khalida,

I, too, have noticed your absense. Also, take note on the comment posted that wasn't you, the name there was K.Q (no second period). People write with a certain signature style, even when just commenting, so it is pretty easy to tell who the real Khalida is. It is also why I believe pixel people to be real, feeling, loving beings and not just figments of a computer screen.

This poem is also interesting to me, for the simple fact that it isn't a facial expression. winking smiley




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