Documenting the feelings of a moment lived
Your whispers linger
In my ears, reaching within;
Touching each particle of my being;
Sinking deep into the realms of sensuality.
Goosebumps tickle my soul,
Move my sleeping senses to a yawn.
Parts, combined to compromise me, try to
Reach out for the unreachable, drastically failing!
Suddenly a moon shines,
A sun rises and deludes the ambiguity
Of dawn, the whisper and the ticklish sensation.
Left to be lost among the turbulent waves of life, I float!
Post Edited (02-10-04 07:47)
i really like you poem it really reaches inside me
K. Q. I liked this. A great closing line!
Thanks again ,Les!
A wonderful title for a marvellous read! Thank you for sharing.
I leave this piece feeling, quiet.
It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)
"A sun rises and deludes the ambiguity
thoroughly enjoyable -- nicely done
may all your moments be as wonderful!
Post Edited (02-20-04 11:07)
Thanks to you all, your comments are encouraging and i really needed the boost of energy! Thanks again!
The poem gives me a strange feeling of the moment. And I agree with Les a lot. That last line was really good.
I like this a lot, gives me a quiet/peaceful feeling.
Thanks Percival, John and all! The floating I state is not really peaceful in the sense that it is a prolongation of a "hanging in between" state of being!!! I'm glad it gave you a sense of peace and quiet, though!