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Sometimes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.southk01.tn.comcast.net)
Date: January 16, 2004 12:51AM

Dedicated to all lovers of the ones who are broken, who are perhaps lost, confused, or hurt by our actions. Take comfort, take heed, and take the love of the ones who cry, for it is all we have to give, and sometimes, we just don't know how. So have faith, have candor, and have a care. We love you....

"Sometimes"


Sometimes things aren't what they seem;
Sometimes your heroine can't dare to dream.
Sometimes people hurt their friends;
sometimes they aren't there until the end.
Sometimes these things leave scars so real;
sometimes we ice 'til we can't feel.

These times you have to scratch the surface;
these times you have to believe for them.
These times you can't swear to never cut;
these times you have to prove your loyalty.
These times you have to heal for your love, 'cause
these times she has lost the fire of her fight.

So light a match to warm the heart;
burn a candle for each tear she cries.
Simple things like holding her close
protect healing wounds from reopening.
Care enough to love her deeper than
her precious defense, so that one day,

when you've stormed her fortress and
raided the town, she'll be able to believe you
when you promise to rebuild it with the
care,
truth,
and love
that she wants to know is

from you,
for her,
forever.



Post Edited (01-16-04 00:01)

I never conquered, rarely came, sixteen just held such better days.


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: wicked (---.nas10.nashville1.tn.us.da.qwest.net)
Date: January 16, 2004 01:53AM



Just... WOW.
This was so moving, Lady- especially for those
of us who are "her..."




wicked


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.southk01.tn.comcast.net)
Date: January 16, 2004 09:04AM

Thank you, very much. I'm glad you can relate... this is something I'm going through with my boyfriend right now, and I can't express it in words to his face, so I wrote about it in a poem and gave it to him. I am "her," as well (naturally).

Lady of the Night

I never conquered, rarely came, sixteen just held such better days.


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Listening Ear (---.southk01.tn.comcast.net)
Date: January 16, 2004 09:18AM

Thoroughly moving... It almost brought me to tears. Sometimes it's hard for guys to know what the lady in our life is thinking. Too many thoughts go through our head clouding what we should concentrate on, our relationship. Reading this will help us all to sit back and think about what it takes to rebuild our loved ones.

Thank You Very Much

Still Listening...


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.southk01.tn.comcast.net)
Date: January 17, 2004 01:35AM

Listening Ear,

I'm glad you were able to get something out of this, are able to take something away that you will hopefully apply in your life and your relationship(s). Naturally, this need not apply only to a romantic relationship: could be a brother, sister, friend, stranger that seems to be having a bad day, or all of the above. Take consideration!

Thank you again,

Lady of the Night

I never conquered, rarely came, sixteen just held such better days.


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: K.Q. (212.118.14.---)
Date: January 17, 2004 03:22AM

beautiful piece and very well deep from the heart!


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: J.H.SUMMERS (---.chartertn.net)
Date: January 17, 2004 11:35AM

Lady,

Sometimes I get you, sometimes I don't...this time I did. Nice job.

john


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: January 17, 2004 12:40PM

Thanks, K.Q.

? John? You don't get me sometimes? I'm glad you "got me" this time. Thanks for reading.

Lady of the Night

I never conquered, rarely came, sixteen just held such better days.


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Jean-Paul (---.nt.net)
Date: January 17, 2004 08:18PM

This line justifies the poem's message:

"these times she has lost the fire of her fight."

It is a watershed that defines the picture. The poem starts off very negative and then it ends on a positive note.
You show a knack for empathy, unless this poem is actually about you; in which case, you are being very honest.
If you don't have a clear picture to transmit, you could master every poetic device and still write bad poetry.
You did a nice job here. I got the picture.

"I "Love Summer more than I hate Winter"


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.southk01.tn.comcast.net)
Date: January 18, 2004 12:40AM

I'm glad you understood this. I like that when you read poetry, you look for the deeper meaning and try to understand things below the surface. That's really cool. A lot of times people write with a deeper meaning, and I really appreciate that you see, and enjoy that. Hey, if I mail you, will you mail back?

Lady of the Night

I never conquered, rarely came, sixteen just held such better days.


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Re: Sometimes
Posted by: Jean-Paul (---.nt.net)
Date: January 18, 2004 04:00AM

Yes sister, I'll reply to anyone that mails me.

"I "Love Summer more than I hate Winter"


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