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Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: joseph torelli (
Date: November 23, 2003 12:50PM

Legally, regally
Arthur of Camelot
'Round the Round Table with
Lancelot sat.

Proving his worth as an
Arthur exchanged his gold
Crown for a hat.

joet 11.23.2003

(You should have warned me Hugh; now that I've fallen prey to the demonic and dastardly double dactyllians, it's impossible to escape their grasp).

Re: Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: Hugh Clary (
Date: November 23, 2003 02:09PM

I know, they are addicting. I once got a DD down to one word per line, if you are interested:



Yeah, I know, not very good but it was a bitch to compose.

For those times when the rhythm absolutely has to be altered, either for a name that does not quite fit, or for a two-syllable ending, one can switch to the McWhirtle. It is a relatively new verse form, invented by Bruce Newling circa 1989. It is named for this little ditty:

Dear Ann Landers

I'm really disgusted
With Myrtle McWhirtle,
The out-of-work bimbo
Residing next door.

She knows where to find
Herself honest employment
But chooses instead to be
Neighborhood whore.

Apparently, Bruce invented it accidentally, while messing up the rhythm of a DD. Still, it is an accepted verse form now, and some even grace the pages of Light Quarterly, the only contemporary light verse magazine I am aware of.

Here is one with the trailing syllables, for comparison:

A scholar who lives in
The village of Cadder
Delivered a talk from
A rickety ladder.

So now he discourses
On physical forces
That clearly have made him
Much wiser if sadder.

The basis formula is that each stanza opens with an iambus, followed by seven anapests. The metrical feet are allowed to rove over from one line to the next. The last words of each stanza rhyme; rhymes elsewhere are optional.

Here is the first one I wrote, messing up the meter, of course:

Said Quintus Horatius,
"Dear me, and good gracious!"
It seems that we rocked him
And terribly shocked him:

He found us translating
His adage on dating,
'Carpe diem', misstating
His tip, 'carpe noctem'.

Re: Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: -Les- (
Date: November 23, 2003 02:10PM

Torelli, gorelli
Author of Camelot
Round the square table
Joseph has sat

Showing his mirth at the
Joseph beheld the past
on his prat.

No offense intended Joseph, it just rhymes.


Re: Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: joseph torelli (
Date: November 23, 2003 10:22PM


Oh, how I wish you hadn't told about McWhirtles. It's bad enough that I mumble in my sleep now; McWhirtles may actually cause me to wake up screaming.

I love your one-word-per-line double dactyl; it is very clever and amusing. I suppose I'll be trying my hand at something similar, as well as the trailing syllable verse.

Thanks for taking the time to read my stuff.



How can I be offended? You are always considerate and willing to help everyone on emule. I enjoyed being the subject of your DD.


Re: Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: -Les- (
Date: April 12, 2004 09:19PM

Sorry, Joseph, but Hugh's double dactyl brought back memories of this earlier one.


Re: Arthur of Camelot
Posted by: northcountrywoman (
Date: April 12, 2004 10:13PM

Heh, heh---Egalitarian....nice. I wouldn't dare get started on these or I'd be muttering and boom ba ba'ing allatime! Most admirably done....!


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