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B Complex
Posted by: K.Q. (212.118.14.---)
Date: November 15, 2003 05:46AM

B Complex


Father: admirable, though tyrannous.
Son: amiable, though pompous.
Mother: a victim of the two.
After additions and subtractions:
Rain pours stones in the heart.

Father: a prestigious cloud of rain.
Mother: too dry to cope with fame.
Sons: a question-markable future.
After multiplying and division:
Another secret is added to the flock.

The grass is not always greener
On the other side of hell.
Flashy flames do devour
Remnants of an ill-devised decision.
Fruit bear fruit of fire and fame!

The story is ongoing till now:
Addition, subtraction, and division.
The vicious cycle must cease,
But lack of will and excess of pride
Deceive an ancient warrior till never!


Re: B Complex
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: November 17, 2003 12:04PM


i'm somewhat surprised that this hasn't had a reply

very interesting perspective KQ! the last line of stanza 1 & 2 are outstanding. a great piece!


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: B Complex
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: November 17, 2003 12:57PM

I liked it K. Q., but I don't know what to make of the third stanza, especially the last two lines of that stanza.

Les


Re: B Complex
Posted by: David Madison (207.157.252.---)
Date: November 17, 2003 02:13PM

B COMPLEX.

A family of vitamins (twelve in all!)
   Whose life is very complex
Since TWO at least in this family sprawl
   Just can’t stop having sex;
Since they’re all pro life, down to the last B,
   Life’s anything but placid
—But a B engaged in profliga-C?
   Now that’s truly folly-asséd!
But try to tell these sons of Bs
   That NO MORE! Bs should follow,
You’ll find they find, each one of these,
   A bitter pill to swallow.
Though we need these Bs to sustain life’s mass
   TOO MANY Bs does vex
Us sons of Bs with STDs.
   Life sho do be complex.

[luciferslexicon.com]—where each day of the weak is Satireday.



Post Edited (11-17-03 13:17)


Re: B Complex
Posted by: K.Q. (212.118.14.---)
Date: November 18, 2003 03:40AM

Thanks Gwydion for your comment! I appreciate it.

Les, although I don't like to exlpain so as not to impose on the reader's own interpretation, as that is the real meaning of a poem, I can say a few things about this one. The first stanza represents generation 1 and the second generation 2. In the last line of the second stanza, a new "secret"/women enters the scene. Therefore, this choice adds but divides ties and creates conflicts that are to complicate the pattern of relationships conceived. The cycle goes on.
In other words this is a descriptive psychoanalysis of a man who is never satisfied due to his own formed complexes that have roots from childhood. Nevertheless, I choose to focus on the lack of will to control due to the lack of awareness to decide to. I don't know if this is making sense, but i really choose to understand and propose an open window "vicious cycle must cease" and "Deceive an ancient warrior" rather than judge and condemn!
Thanks for your encouragement!

Very humorous poem, David!


Re: B Complex
Posted by: cad (---.strl1201.mi.comcast.net)
Date: November 18, 2003 04:22PM

I like the originality; I cannot say that I've seen a work like this on this forum before. Great ideas.

cad


Re: B Complex
Posted by: K.Q. (212.118.14.---)
Date: November 19, 2003 02:40AM

Thank you cad, that's very encouraging. I apppreciate the complement!




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