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Posted by: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)
Date: October 18, 2003 05:14AM

I fall into love;
fall out of hope;
A dream once realized
Is dead!

fall out of love;
fall into hope;
A dream once dead
Is reborn!

A falling sun
Dipping into a
Wandering spirit:
Hope is conspiring
Against love!

And I, I, I fall
Here:
Into a poem
Yet to emerge!


Just a first draft! Any suggestions for improvment? Title??


Re: No Title Yet?
Posted by: bart1963 (---.cae.bellsouth.net)
Date: October 18, 2003 09:20AM

Really like the idea. I'm really too new at this (poetry) to dare make a suggestion... other than for a title. Maybe "I Fall". Or "Falling". Those are the most obvious I think.

Bart




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