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a new facial expression!
Posted by: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)
Date: October 15, 2003 07:21AM

Adventure

Give Time a chance
To sow coincidences
In our path.

Let the sun and rain
Intensely do their magic
Harmoniously.

And as the seeds
Erupt in violent motion,
Let them be.

Eventually,
Nature, not god,
Will take its course of action!


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: October 15, 2003 12:48PM



Mother Nature, Godda love her!

great bit of writing KQ


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: October 15, 2003 01:44PM

I liked the poem. But then I'm a naturalist at heart.

Les


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: October 15, 2003 03:08PM

I would feel better about it if God were capitalized.

Otherwise very likeable. Reminds me of the forest. Bugs that bite, snakes that slither, skunks that spray...

Sorry. Got a little carried away. It's pretty durn good.


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: ink ghost (---.ipt.aol.com)
Date: October 15, 2003 03:49PM

I have to agree with Keeper of Light God should be capitalized.

"Eventually,
Nature, not god,
Will take its course of action!"

Doesn't nature, a creation of God, take its commandments from God? Thus, its course of action would be God's and not its own. However, if you don't believe in God or if you believe that God's power is limited, which is preposterous for if in deed He created the earth would he not be ably to control it? for creating some thing "ex nihil" (out of nothing) is far harder then controlling it, I could see how you could come to this opinion. well any way these are the thoughts that went through my head when I read your writing.



Post Edited (10-15-03 16:55)

I.T.


Magna res est vocis et silentii temperamentum


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: K.Q. (---.nets.com.jo)
Date: October 16, 2003 12:58AM

Thank you all! I am speechless.
As for your comment, keeper of light and ink ghost, when i write "god" i really mean man and not God. Man,god, is a creator in many imperfect ways. This is just to clarify!
Thanks a lot!
K.Q.


Re: a new facial expression!
Posted by: illudiumphosdex (69.14.181.---)
Date: October 16, 2003 03:01PM

KQ, I really like this poem. I might change S2 around a bit. Upon first reading, "intensely" and "harmoniously" sound awkward on two different lines. Not sure what to do there, but then it hit me that the first 3 stanzas have a 4-7-3 syllable count except for "harmoniously" in S2. Just my opinion...




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