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Posted by: wicked (
Date: August 19, 2003 03:36AM


secrets tucked neatly away,
erroneous veil in place.
pause & breathe in daylight,
a dauntless daring face.
day after day, they all deduce-
demure confidence to be true.
as essence sheathes malaise-
the trepidations of her youth.
in ominous splendor,
she lies alone-
as slumber awakens sobs.
enigma revealed,
atrocities exposed,
her demons have
commenced their stalk...
a haunted mind battles on-
throughout the silent screams.
as idle prayer lingers,
although relinquished-
for one moment,
one glimpse,
of peace.


Re: she
Posted by: illudiumphosdex (
Date: August 19, 2003 01:37PM

Wicked, I hope she finds peace! I know that I was looking for it after I read this. Good, but unsettling...

Re: she
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: August 19, 2003 04:01PM

love your choice of words, truly brilliant!

once again your piece keeps the reader interested and your style evokes new and interesting thoughts and ideas

It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)

Re: she
Posted by: omantic_53 (
Date: September 05, 2003 12:05AM

Ha ha Damn girl.......I like your works......I think you found another fan..


Re: she
Posted by: lgreen (
Date: September 05, 2003 11:05AM

wicked: your works reflect underlying torment.........very wel done.. Ell
(you mentioned that you write about your "own" experiences...I hope these are from a past and that you have travelled beyond these feelings or are at least working on it.....Ell

Re: she
Posted by: -Les- (
Date: September 06, 2003 12:25PM

You must have posted this while I was on vacation, good work. Are the other
two by you revisions, seems like I've read them before?


Re: she
Posted by: wicked (
Date: September 07, 2003 02:33AM

Les... which two? Last two posts are a very old one, &
a rough draft.... Thanx for the confidence btw, means much
from you - lol

El... Thanx sooo much, it means alot simply because I
do respect/admire your work. As for the rest, I'm a
"work in progress" of sorts.

Thank you, thank you, thank you omantic! I look forward
to reading your posts each & every time they pop up!


Re: she
Posted by: J.H.SUMMERS (
Date: September 07, 2003 02:39AM


I like your style. Your words are very descriptive.


Re: she
Posted by: morbid (
Date: September 07, 2003 09:43AM

that inspired me to go get a job and work instead of writting these stupid poems.goodnight!!

Re: she
Posted by: Terry (
Date: September 07, 2003 11:36AM

I like the top half and the bottom half.. but I stumbled when the rhymes quit.
Heck I don't know, ask Les and Bruce, they understand English.

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