This was my second attempt at poetry in mid-1999.


Flutter

Eyes fluttered
Heart rate slowed
Then the dream began

You touched what lay out of reach
Your hunger was finally quelled
My eyes locked with yours
And you understood

The sounds swirled around you
Answering a thousand questions
The gently spoken word became your name
And you understood

Suddenly I awoke
Remembering all, I rushed to you
Arriving to find slowly blinking eyes
Shallow breaths and folded hands

Eyes fluttered
Heart rate slowed
Then the dream began



Post Edited (07-30-03 11:00)

I liked the flow here... This is my favorite of yours.

Les

ill: Liked this poem alot. Sweet dreams to sweet reality...Ell

S2 L3 "our eyes locked with yours" ....maybe "my" eyes

Les, thanks again for your feedback, means a lot.

Lgreen, I think I'll try that, it will help avoid clarity. Thanks again!

I really liked this one. A love poem, for sure. Nancy

life imitates a dreamstate only capable of being brought on by a true love. i have been (still am) there. ) loved this read!



(though words have an end
love's ascendancy does not

im ready to fly...)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Man is to be saved by faith not works; yet his faith must be shown by his works. - E.G White

Art is a step from what is obvious and well-known toward what is arcane and concealed. -Kahlil Gibran

I wonder where Bob has wandered.


Les

Illudium Phosdex 14 up, 4 down

The shaving cream atom, supplies of which become dangerously low on Earth in the 24th & 1/2 century, necessitating a mission by Duck Dodgers to claim Illudium Phosdex-rich Planet X in the name of Earth.

Not to be confused with its unstable isotope Illudium Pew-36
"Try new Pheno-Barbasol with the healing power of Illudium Phosdex"
--from the Urban Dictionary

Bob explained once the derivative of the name, it's from a comic strip. Perhaps, Johnny could enlighten us.

Les