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A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 03, 2003 05:52PM

A little more than a mile

Climbing the turves
shadowy air amidst
sunlit peaks softly
made murmering
our gentle oath.
In dotage danced
deep-cloven banks
of grassclad orchards,
tunder arched bay-side
of the widening tilth.
Forged the furlong
'till great dingle met
was not an echo or
a whisper made but
hearts spoke truth
with sacred hush,
twined and rooted
'gainst curling knoll.

Zoe


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 03, 2003 06:53PM


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Terry (---.75.24.51.Dial1.Phoenix1.Level3.net)
Date: July 03, 2003 08:09PM

oink!


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: JP (---.tnt1.rochelle.il.da.uu.net)
Date: July 03, 2003 09:37PM

Zoe,
I liked this one a lot.
I got most of the words from my youth, but what the heck is tunder?
JP


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 03, 2003 11:11PM

Zoe, been messing around in the "t's" again. lol No tunder in my dictionary, did you mean tundra, or tinder perhaps?

Les


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 04:30AM


JP

Thanks, "tunder" is ......er.......oh! apparantly non existant!


Les

Drat, I was sure "tunder" was a word, I imagined it to be kind of earthy so I guess tundra will do.

Zoe


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 04:42AM

How about terrace?

Les


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 04:51AM

Terrace as in a flat, narrow stretch of ground, often having a steep slope facing a river, lake, or sea would be good but the overall feeling of the word is
too urban, I think, thanks for the suggestion.

Zoe


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 05:14AM

Too urban? Check out the bottom passages and pictures at this website:

[kyapa.tripod.com] />

Les


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 06:23AM

Okay then Les, link master, terraces:

[astonbrook-through-astonmanor.co.uk] /> [www.geoexplorer.co.uk] />
The second one is my favourite example of terraces - urban!

Zoe


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 12:32PM

My point was simply that a terrace can be an area of differing elevation.

Les


Re: A little more than a mile
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 01:29PM

OK, terrace it is then. I just thought it sounded a bit man made, really wanted a word that meant formed by the elements and so on, but terrace is fine.

A little more than a mile

Climbing the turves
shadowy air amidst
sunlit peaks softly
made murmering
our gentle oath.
In dotage danced
deep-cloven banks
of grassclad orchards,
terrace arched bay-side
of the widening tilth.
Forged the furlong
'till great dingle met
was not an echo or
a whisper made but
hearts spoke truth
with sacred hush,
twined and rooted
'gainst curling knoll.

Zoe


Thanks again, Les




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