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Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.202.131.---)
Date: March 04, 2003 04:21PM

Thanks a lot.

Thank you so much for coming into
my life and turning it all upside down
and inside out, making a mess of
my sensible chaos. You broke through
my walls, carelessly, with a promise
to always care. How could I have believed
you?

I'm so confused; I shouldn't love you.
I don't know you. People like you don't
exist in this world. Selflessness is a dream
told in fairytales, and true love is drowned
out by heartaches of others.

Your genuine care of me exists in a world
of apathy.

And yet, when everything's chaotic, and
nobody understands or can tolerate what
I go through from day to day, and I get
tired from the burdens of breathing,
and nothing makes sense through these
chocolate brown eyes... there you stand
with your warm, golden skin, honest heart
and those eyes, those eyes of trouble
that make me weak in the knees. Your eyes
make me want to live and truly breathe. They
scare me with your promise to always love,
and I feel myself falling without a reason to be
caught.

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.202.131.---)
Date: March 04, 2003 04:33PM

Thanks a lot.

Thank you so much for coming into
my life and turning it all upside down
and inside out, making a mess of
my sensible chaos. You broke through
my walls, carelessly, with a promise
to always care. How could I have believed
you?

I'm so confused; I shouldn't love you.
I don't know you. People like you don't
exist in this world. Selflessness is a dream
told in fairytales, and lovers' sweet nothings
are drowned out by heartwrenching tears of
heartache.

Your genuine care of me exists in a world
of apathy.

And yet, when everything's chaotic, and
nobody understands or can tolerate what
I go through from day to day, and I get
tired from the burdens of breathing,
and nothing makes sense through these
chocolate brown eyes... there you stand
with your warm, golden skin, honest heart
and those eyes, those eyes of trouble
that make me weak in the knees. Your eyes
make me want to live and truly breathe. They
scare me with your promise to always love,
and I feel myself falling without a reason to be
caught.

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: March 05, 2003 12:40PM

Lady, this was excellent, I very much liked the last line in which it read: And I Feel Myself Falling Without A Reason To Be Caught. This must be a personal poem for you, and I wish you luck in whatever desicion you are hoping will come. This poem shows that everyone has to make large choices at one point, and the real question is, what to do with the answer that is given to us.

-Oxide Slain


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.195.---)
Date: March 05, 2003 08:52PM

Thanks Caleb smiling smiley And yes, this is personal; it's for my boyfriend, Angelito. He came to see me! Yay! Anyways, I'm really glad you like it. I like your work as well, and for you to enjoy mine is flattering. Any suggestions?

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: March 06, 2003 12:24PM

Really? Was it the first time you ever met? And I do have one suggestion, I wouldn't put "your genuine care of me exists in a world of apathy" in it's own line. Cheers!

-Oxide Slain


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.192.---)
Date: March 06, 2003 03:56PM

Yes, first meeting smiling smiley It was great! More than I ever expected. Where would you put the line?

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: March 06, 2003 05:48PM

Personally I wouldn't even put it in but if I ahd to choose...

I'm so confused; I shouldn't love you.
I don't know you. People like you don't
exist in this world. Selflessness is a dream
told in fairytales, and lovers' sweet nothings
are drowned out by heartwrenching tears of
heartache. Your genuine care of me exists in a world
of apathy.

(Just move it up a bit)

-Oxide Slain


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.202.131.---)
Date: March 06, 2003 06:01PM

Hmm.. I'll consider it. Thanks smiling smiley

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: March 13, 2003 09:07AM

Self-promoting

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Emerald (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: March 13, 2003 09:37AM

I really enjoyed this poem as well, Lady. (Quoting from L.O.T.R. aren't we know Caleb?) smiling smiley This piece was quite pretty, Lady. And I think you should keep that line od the poem, I like it. But I also think you should join it to the above stanza. (I.M.O) Hugz! Good Job! And best 'o luck in your relationship!

-Shae


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.193.---)
Date: March 13, 2003 10:58PM

Wait, are you Caleb? Lol, and what was Caleb quoting from LOTR? Hmm... really think I should join it to the above stanza? Why? I was hoping that keeping it separate would isolate it and give it the power that comes with such.. maybe I failed.

Thanks for your thoughts smiling smiley

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Noloco.... (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: March 14, 2003 04:31AM

Lady i must say truely a wonderful work of poetry. Loved your entertwining ways with the words. Lovely very lovely. Hey Meggie will be here April 12 to the 27..wait i think thats right. tongue sticking out smiley Yes very wonderful use of words. I did enjoy very much. Sounds as if you put alot of thought into this one.


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: lgreen (---.client.attbi.com)
Date: March 14, 2003 04:45AM

Lady: Sounds like love-----------it is very scary!--when you fall in love you are actually giving away alot of power to someone--the power to hurt you--at least that is the fear--sometimes you just have to trust and take a free fall. Apparently--you and Angelito had a very good time and you bonded---oh and your words express well your emotion!! Well done! Ell


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.192.---)
Date: March 14, 2003 05:41PM

Thanks, guys. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Do either of you have any suggestions? I'm so happy for you, Noco! I'm sure y'all two will have a blast grinning smiley Ell, like I said in "I'm Searching for Something," neither of us are ready to fall in love yet - and I'll fight it every inch of the way! Have been for going on eleven months now, lol. But ya know, he doesn't really give me much choice, I have to trust him and fall. He's difficult like that grinning smiley But I love him.

Any suggestions?

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: March 15, 2003 10:35PM

Nutmeg,

As I said when last I spoke to you, I feel that both this poem and Searching for Something are very good. Some of your best work in fact. Likewise as previously stated, these show a maturity that many of your previous poems have lacked, and I think are on par with Intellectual Intercourse, or very nearly.

I consider myself honoured, to have been able to watch you grow as both a person and a poet, and it is great to have you as a peer and count you a friend.

As also stated (but now publicly), I knew that you were special the very first time that I talked to you, which was almost exactly a year ago, (such a short time to have learned to love so much!).

With love and affection Nutmeg,


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.192.---)
Date: March 16, 2003 05:10PM

Actually, I think it's been a year! A year and a week or something. I posted Daria's profile on March 19, a few days after acceptance/first play, and I was talking to you for almost a week before that. Your approval is what I'm looking for every time I write, so in that sense, they're all for you. Quite a few times I've wished that it could be you to give me away at my wedding, but my father, though he's made a LOT of mistakes, has done the best that he knew how to do. You played a part in helping me realize that (a small one, but still a part). Thank you, and I love you. big hug and a kiss on the cheek

Do you have any suggestions as to how to better the piece?

~Nutmeg


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: March 18, 2003 09:04AM

What... these thoughts? grinning smiley Lol, it's true, darling. mwah

Lady of the Night


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Sleeping
Posted by: Mink (203.91.134.---)
Date: March 18, 2003 11:32AM

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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: March 19, 2003 09:01AM

That so, Mink?

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: March 20, 2003 01:42PM

Megan,

I cannot thank you enough for that beautiful post. I have read it over more than four times now, and each time it has brought me to tears.

I am still speechless, and so I am going to let another speak for me.


Father and Daughter
(Print the Lyrics)


If you leap awake
In the mirror of a bad dream
And for a fraction of a second
You cant remember where you are
Just open your window
And follow your memory upstream
To the meadow in the mountain
Where we counted every falling star

I believe the light that shines on you
Will shine on you forever
And though I cant guarantee
Theres nothing scary hiding under your bed
Iím gonna stand guard
Like a postcard of a Golden Retriever
And never leave till I leave you
With a sweet dream in your head

Im gonna watch you shine
Gonna watch you grow
Gonna paint a sign
So youll always know
As long as one and one is two
There could never be a father
Who loved his daughter more than I love you

Trust your intuition
Its just like going fishing
You cast your line
And hope you get a bite
But you dont need to waste your time
Worrying about the market place
Try to help the human race
Struggling to survive its harshest night

Im gonna watch you shine
Gonna watch you grow
Gonna paint a sign
So youll always know
As long as one and one is two
There could never be a father
Who loved his daughter more than I love you

Im gonna watch you shine
Gonna watch you grow
Gonna paint a sign
So youll always know
As long as one and one is two
There could never be a father
Who loved his daughter more than I love you



With love,


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.202.131.---)
Date: March 20, 2003 04:35PM

Awwwe! Who sings that song? I wanna download and burn it. Well... I didn't mean to make you cry..! Geez.. lol. I'm glad you're so touched, though smiling smiley I've been making a lot of people cry lately.. well, you're only the second, but hey. I love you, Brucie.

So guess what I got on my interim reports, guys.. All Bs except for two Cs. Wanna hear?

World Lit - B
American Government - B
Psychology - B (Good class participation)
College Intermediate Chemistry - C (Needs more effort in preparation)
French III - N/A (Needs to make up missing work)
Photography - C (Needs to make up missing work)

Ohhh yeah winking smiley Lol. Aren't y'all proud o' me!!!! I'm not. I could be doing better, but... the work is sooooo boring, and I forget to do it a lot. I'll be the first to say "Thank God for tests and quizzes!" 'Cause I know the material, I just can't/don't do the homework.

What else... oh!! I was at the library yesterday looking at airfares one way from Portland, ME to San Francisco, CA, right? The cheapest was about $369 USD. So this guy asked me where I was going, and I told him San Francisco, and he suggested flying into San Jose (about 40 minutes away) and out of Manchester, NH, or else into Oakland (just across the bridge from SF) out of Burlington, VT. So I did all of that business, and check out the deals (fees included):

(One Way) Burlington, VT -> Oakland, CA = $154
(Round Trip) San Jose, CA -> Manchester, NH = $263
(Round Trip) Oakland, CA -> Burlington, VT = $308

Sooooo, Angelito will probably pay the few dollars more and fly out of Oakland into Burlington so he can go to my graduation, and we'll both fly back on (hopefully) the same flight the day after grad. grinning smiley Yay!!!

Pizza's ready, so I gots to go. Love you all! MWAH

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: March 20, 2003 05:44PM

Laughin' at you! God forbid we get in the way of your pizza dear! hehehe.

The song in question was written and is sung by Paul Simon, formerly of Simon and Garfunkel.

I would certainly have prefered a better puntuated version, as I know that Paul Simon himself would never have been that sloppy, but at least you have the words now.

I do in fact think of you whenever I hear it play on the radio.

Hugs!


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: March 21, 2003 12:36PM

Awwwe! You'll have to come to my wedding and we'll dance to it smiling smiley

Do you have any suggestions to this piece, or Searching for Something?

Lady of the Night


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: March 24, 2003 07:06AM

Lady,

Could you post these two onto Cosmic, so that I don't forget about them, and can give them a proper looking over^

Thanks dear!

You save that dance for me, ya hear? I will be there, if I have to have Terry come get me!


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Re: Down to You
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: March 24, 2003 09:06AM

Sure I will, but I'll have to do it later today. Tell you what: if they're not up by 2:14 my time, can you post them on Cosmic for me? Thanks much smiling smiley And 'course I'll save you the dance! mwah Love you

Lady of the Night


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