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A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.192.---)
Date: December 11, 2002 09:31PM

I have come to a realization, and that is that I am in a cycle that I'm not
sure I can break free from. One that is so dangerous, so detrimental to me,
but I can't quit; it's like smoking or heroin, once you've started there is no
going back without trying, and it is the trying which you bow to, tip your
head away from so that you don't have to see it, see yourself, see who
you've become. That way it doesn't hurt, that way it isn't real, or true, and
you can just continue life the way you have been. What you don't know
can't hurt you, right? Isn't that what they always say?

So maybe I'll just slip back into that comfortable cycle that is familiar and
warm. There is a fine line between reality and denial - and the latter is
often prettier, so maybe that's just where I'll stay. Here, where it is happy
and considerably smooth (with just the right amount of frost heaves and
blind curves to keep it interesting), where I can just relax and be free of all
that I was running from my entire life. After all, I'm certain that just as before, the ripples will soon smooth out and my reflection will reappear just
as I knew it to be.

Lady of the Night


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Les (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: December 11, 2002 10:45PM

This is not a comment on the poem. But rather the answer to a comment you made on a discussion forum many months ago, which I just read this evening. If you're interested check out this website: [www.bobdylan.com] />
To me the best line in the song/poem is I'll know my song well before I start singing.


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Noloco (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: December 11, 2002 11:11PM

Very interesting. Emotional in some ways. Im not sure though Lady. I will come back. Well that is what i always say. Though i will.

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 12, 2002 01:17AM

This seems different then your other more recent work, and if you want to talk about theropy poem...WOOOOOOOO, your good..... Anyway, different, but very good, motivational (and that's what counts!).


Love, Peace, and French Fries

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: December 12, 2002 03:23AM

I liked your second stanza better Nutmeg, as the first sounds much too clinical and, well, matter of fact. i.e. no real imagery.


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Ian Beaumont (---.cache.pol.co.uk)
Date: December 12, 2002 07:41AM

It very much sounds like me and my depression. I don't really want to face it, face up to it. I just want to be able to live my life, with my friends, but I know I can't keep going like this, yet it remains the most comfortable option.

Ian B


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.192.---)
Date: December 12, 2002 10:14AM

Lol, it is matter of fact... I can't say more, but thanks for the comments, guys. I'm taking Sarah's turn, but I'll be back later. Thank you again smiling smiley Bye!

Lady of the Night

P.S. Yeahhhhhh!!!!!!!! French Fries!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.194.---)
Date: December 12, 2002 01:25PM

Les,

Hmm.... I've forgotten what request that was? I'll go to the site, maybe it'll remind me, lol.

Noco,

Suuuuure ya will winking smiley I'm curious; you say you "don't know." What don't you know?

Caleb,

Yeah... I suppose this was therapy in a way, but not the same way as yours or my others. This was a result of what YOU did! Lol. You told me that maybe I did have to write therapy and... grr! Lol, look what you did! tongue sticking out smiley

Bruce,

Yeah, I was thinking the same thing. The first is matter of fact, yes, because... well, I suppose I don't know why. But Caleb wrote a therapy piece, and so we were discussing how much they can help, and how they're not written for an audience, rather, to make us feel better. That's what this is; it's more of a personal piece rather than art. So I'm not sure I'll revise it at all. I can't say I like this piece, but again.. therapy smiling smiley

Ian,

I'm glad you could relate to this. I write (normally) for my audience, so that people will enjoy reading it, and if they can relate to it, that makes it so many worlds better. I'm really glad you can understand it and relate. I think that's so important, because so often, people feel like they're alone, even though they "know" they're not, and when they can find someone who feels what they do, it's like a brand-new realization, and it feels amazing. It's like a sigh of relief, and it's comfortable and brings a certain light to our eyes to take the place of the emptiness. At least... that's what it is for me smiling smiley

Thanks guys.

Hmm... goes back into thought smiling smiley

Lady of the Night


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 12, 2002 04:13PM

Thought, something I don't do much....I AM SPARTIKUS! (I forgot I used to use that as a secret chant!)


Love, Peace, and Likkle Froggys

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.194.---)
Date: December 12, 2002 04:20PM

Who IS spartikus??????? And I thought it was "Spartacus" but probly not.

Lady of the Night


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 12, 2002 07:08PM

Nop, it's spartikus...And he was a greek god.

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 12, 2002 07:08PM

Nop, it's spartikus...And he was a greek god.

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ca.shawcable.net)
Date: December 13, 2002 04:13AM

I have never heard of Spartakus, Greek god or otherwise Oxide; what was he the god of?

Spartacus on the other hand was a gladiator slave who lead a rebellion against Rome... I can't recall what Caesar was sitting at the time though; perhaps Cladius? Anyway, good old Sparticus was crucified for his trouble... I think. Might have history confused with the movie, that is why I hate historical movies that Hollywood the stories.

Anywho, I look forward to your answer.

Lady,
Only change it if you want it to stand the test of time, but if it works better for you to leave it as is, instead of flowering it up to the point where YOU may not recall what the message was meant to convey, than by all means DON'T mess with it.

Hugs!


Ripples to the weak
Posted by: Percival (---.hu.sd.cox.net)
Date: December 13, 2002 05:58AM

Cripples only to me
Gotta shake to be
Gotta bank to beat
Gotta make you take a seat you only hold me back
You only get in the way of my incredibly quick attack which always lacks a need to be held back
I attack and never draw more than blood and cartilage and bone.
Never seen a scar caused by me and never could be the creator
Never could be the maker of such beautifully healing pain
Which never strikes you with gain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.194.---)
Date: December 14, 2002 05:06PM

Thank you, Bruce. I will! Lol

Jaguar... you worry me.

Lady of the Night


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Janine (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 14, 2002 08:39PM

Lady --

love this piece
i could almost see it being done as a monologue on stage

Janine


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 15, 2002 02:51PM

Yes, spartikus wasn't a god, but the son of one. He wasn't immortal to the best of my knowledge. Though he might have been. Yeah, why rmans had that name was because rome came from greece. And I don't think he was the god of anything, he was sortov like hercules. Wait, was herc the god of something???

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Holding Mercury (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: December 15, 2002 02:53PM

He was a lot like a warrior...

-Oxide Slain


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.193.---)
Date: December 15, 2002 04:24PM

I don't think Hercules was the god of anything, but wasn't he only half-god?

And thank you, Janine, for your comments. Are you new here? Welcome! smiling smiley

Lady of the Night


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: ~Syn~ (---.ne.client2.attbi.com)
Date: December 15, 2002 04:36PM

Lady...
I agree with Janine. Well done winking smiley
I love your reflections...

~Syn~


Re: A Disturbance in the Waters
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.193.---)
Date: December 15, 2002 04:37PM

Thank you very much, Syn. smiling smiley Which reflections do you mean?

Lady of the Night




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