Chaos hurt pain loss love joy
Sorrow angst T The Void T hatred
Fear panic ---- h ------------ h lust id
Desire ego ---- e ------------ e forgiveness
Guilt anger---------------------- terror revenge
Indifference -- v-- DOGS -- v apathy passive
Happiness ---- o ------------- o suffering
Betrayal-------- i ------------- i self-centred
Glee euphoria d The Void compassion
Self-discipline worry agony despair

Bruce Herbert Fader 04-04-2013 08:02
-still a work in progress. For Terry Johnson
(Spacing isn‘t working )

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 04/09/2013 10:14PM by Boo Cipher.

This works for me.

The construction befogs the meaning here Bruce. But I like it nevertheless. Keep writing.

Les

In my original concept, Les, I had Ki in the middle where dog is now. Ki being the centre one tries to focus on when in a state of war. The void, or non place is also where one centres themself when fighting, so that emotion doesn‘t befuddle logic ans cause you to make rash decisions. I have embraced the void on many occasions througout my life, starting when I was ten. It was a Viet Nam vet, Charles Sprague, who gave me those first small tools to wall off emotion to protect my psyche and I have been forever grateful to him for that. For me that one place where peace truly reigns supreme is when I am with my dogs. Doesn‘t matter how crappy my day went, my dogs can make it better. They are a part of me; fused into my soul and as such I understand them better than I do people. I have blithely walked into compounds with dogs trained to attack and been scratching them behind the ears by the time their slavers show up.

I hope that it makes more sense now. Which means the poem failed, right? Lol.

Peter, my thanks!

Bruce, check the page source for Peter's "some of us", it'll show how he keeps the original formatting here on this forum.


Les

Chaos hurt pain loss love joy



Sorrow angst    T The Void     T hatred

Fear panic ---- h ------------ h lust id

Desire ego ---- e ------------ e forgiveness

Guilt anger---------------------- terror revenge

Indifference -- v--    DOGS -- v apathy passive

Happiness ----  o -------------o suffering

Betrayal------- i ------------ i self-centered

Glee euphoria   d ----- The Void compassion



Self-discipline worry agony despair

Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 04/11/2013 10:43PM by les712.

am loving both the words and the concept

Bruce, I hope you don't mind me saying, but perhaps this would be better if it were constructed horizontally, rather than vertically. Difficult to know how to read this one.

Ian B
(fka cityprod)

I am very impressed with the contstruciton of this one. Like the story that goes with it too. Neat job, my friend.