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Tête A Tête
Posted by: Boo Cipher (184.151.231.---)
Date: April 03, 2013 03:00AM

Tête A Tête

I thought....

So many things,
that I had inspired words,
both whirling and wickedly surmised
in their originality
and coy turn of copulated phrase;
your ink a bloody artistry
pulsed like a single heartbeat
in a singularity of blazing brilliance,
its halo echoing out
across heaven's ever widening reach,
but...

I was merely the hollow
inside.

Bruce Herbert Fader 04-02-2013 22:54


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: April 03, 2013 04:30AM

Very nicely done, Bruce. One of your best efforts.


Les


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Boo Cipher (184.151.231.---)
Date: April 03, 2013 01:25PM

Thanks Les. Bit of a run on sentence going on there though, which needs to be fixed.


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: petersz (50.136.226.---)
Date: April 03, 2013 01:57PM

Ouch!


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Gwydion2 (99.199.110.---)
Date: April 18, 2013 05:04PM

Wow, boo, fantastic. edgy and tight


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Boo Cipher (184.151.118.---)
Date: April 19, 2013 03:17PM

Thanks, Gwydion, much appreciated.


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Merc (174.126.181.---)
Date: April 20, 2013 01:33PM

Pete,, howcome the "ouch"?


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: petersz (50.136.226.---)
Date: April 20, 2013 05:26PM

'cause empathetically I felt the pain of the author and felt I had to say it for him.


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Merc (174.126.181.---)
Date: April 20, 2013 06:57PM

OK,, I'll buy that. I was thinking it hurt you to read it and that wasn't nice. Sort of out of character for you. Agree with your ouch


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Re: Tête A Tête
Posted by: Boo Cipher (70.77.64.---)
Date: April 21, 2013 11:58PM

Lol. I knew what ouch it was Terry, however if it had been the other kind, that would be okay too.


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