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A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: rainysunshine (79.173.223.---)
Date: March 20, 2013 11:42PM

Can’t you see, Time does not skip me!
The stretch of my arms is not as wide
as it used to extensively be.
The pull of gravity is fiercer on
my escalating hump of years;
it grows heavier with all the fears
of needing to give more and more;
its elasticity stiffens, becoming
perhaps crackable, breakable,
strikingly unwontedly deranged.

And yet I am happy with the passage
of seeping seconds, thirds and fourths
to the cells within the pours of my life
as they grow, and growl, and grin,
because they breathe bright moments
despite extremes that have become
soluble, dissolving within the powers of
my toughened roughened tightened skin.
So I let go, let loose, let all who want to win
win; and I simply give in; I give in; I give in!


Re: A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: March 20, 2013 11:48PM

I like this one, Khalida, especially the second half. Nicely done.

Les


Re: A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: rainysunshine (79.173.223.---)
Date: March 20, 2013 11:49PM

Thanks Les.


Re: A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: Boo Cipher (70.77.53.---)
Date: March 20, 2013 11:52PM

Khalida,

This almost reads like a sonnet. Very impressive piece of writing.

I was wondering though; did you mean pores, not pours?

Either way you are right; there is no fighting getting older. smiling smiley


Re: A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: hpesoj (68.199.58.---)
Date: March 21, 2013 06:12AM

Khalida:

"So I let go, let loose, let all who want to win
win; and I simply give in; I give in; I give in!"

I'm not quite there yet, but I'm learning...I'm learning.

Joe


Re: A Timed Facial Expression
Posted by: petersz (50.136.226.---)
Date: March 21, 2013 10:13PM

And yet I am happy with the passage
of seeping seconds, thirds and fourths

ditto

amo et avanti,

Peter




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