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The Barn
Posted by: larkinabout (81.132.33.---)
Date: March 05, 2013 12:15AM

No levels, no Jesus in the hay loft.
I should like to raise you to the ground.

No, not raze. You are open plan;
horizons meet in you. From an angle.

A decaying shell with echoes…
A burnt out love mattress juts

the ironist of springs, penetration
is all consuming, here, in this

ruined place. The wind can gather;
orchestrate tin cans, blow above

one sheer cider bottle, then leave
exhumed by the very bleakness

that portends your potential, that
sketches the incurvate - a head in hand.


Re: The Barn
Posted by: hpesoj (68.199.58.---)
Date: March 05, 2013 06:40AM

Good to hear from you again Kris. I see you haven't lost your touch...some nice phrasing and imagery here; I particularly like the picture of the wind orchestrating tin cans and blowing above "one sheer cider bottle."

Joe


Re: The Barn
Posted by: petersz (50.136.226.---)
Date: April 22, 2013 01:55AM

Keep 'em coming.




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