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“The Stink of Us”
Posted by: Gwydion2 (99.199.110.---)
Date: February 01, 2013 01:15AM

There’s a stink to the world today
and a hundred minutes later
nothing’s changed or changing.
...
This is why aromatic love feels
like a cat stalking a mouse,
cornered and quivering with grey.

And once a year, when it’s March
and you’re bogged down in the blues
just spit the blood into the sink

Wipe the spittle with your wrist,
wipe your wrist on your jeans,
punch the mirror reflecting back at you.

And just so you know, wrinkling your nose
does not impregnate the air around,
but moves with you, too soft against your skin.

Ah, but then again, I could be the last liar
doing the final countdown backwards,
and you’ve got to wonder why love’s stink is circular.

Its rhythmic coitus blends seconds,
into minutes into hours into days into months
into years into infinity…yes, we stink.


Re: “The Stink of Us”
Posted by: les712 (68.185.67.---)
Date: February 01, 2013 01:35AM

You've grown a lot as a poet Gwydion, good to have you posting. I like this poem.

Les


Re: “The Stink of Us”
Posted by: petersz (50.136.226.---)
Date: February 01, 2013 03:26AM

thank god for bad moods
...you succeeded in cheering me up.

amo,

Peter


Re: “The Stink of Us”
Posted by: Gwydion2 (99.199.110.---)
Date: February 01, 2013 06:48PM

Thank you Les and Peter; it's nice to be here, although very quiet!


Re: “The Stink of Us”
Posted by: hpesoj (68.199.58.---)
Date: February 02, 2013 09:04PM

a cat stalking a mouse,
cornered and quivering with grey.

Grat imagery throughout the poem, but these lines, especially. Well done.

Joe


Re: “The Stink of Us”
Posted by: Gwydion2 (99.199.110.---)
Date: February 03, 2013 03:07PM

Thank you Joe; this piece came about because of a stinky garbage can I had just walked by...inspiration strikes so randomly




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