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slow nails
Posted by: mr yuck (---.tnt2.fredericksburg.va.da.uu.net)
Date: October 22, 2002 02:02PM

a field in the light
a plane to any other
perspective plain as day
so go away tonight

we ride
our wave
but we are senseless to the wind
its nobodys fault but my own

short time
two views
patterned out like a cloud at night
rain rusting silver lining

in the shadows of houses
life in the dirt
lining the foundation
keeping the rain out


Re: slow nails
Posted by: Jay (---.system42.com)
Date: October 22, 2002 02:49PM

a field in the light
a plane to any other
perspective plain as day
so go away tonight


I'm sorry, but this makes absolutely no sense to me.

Jay


Re: slow nails
Posted by: Noloco (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: October 24, 2002 12:44AM

explanation? I understand that more then anything this poem was written based on what you thought and what you see in this poem,but however i can't grasp the meaning or anything about it.

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: slow nails
Posted by: mr yuck (---.tnt1.fredericksburg.va.da.uu.net)
Date: October 24, 2002 12:03PM

scabs guns and peanut butter.its all about scabs guns and peanutbutter.


Re: slow nails
Posted by: Jay (---.system42.com)
Date: October 24, 2002 12:28PM

Oh yeah...it all makes sense to me now!
Okay, it still makes no sense.

Look, there is abstract poetry....that is one thing.
Then, there is the stuff you write...that is a whole other thing.

It's not cool. You might think it is cool, but it's not cool to be so vague.

Jay


Re: slow nails
Posted by: David Madison (207.157.252.---)
Date: October 24, 2002 12:47PM

Jay,

Leave the poor boy alone. Can't you see that he's a member in good standing of the Obscurity=Profundity School of Noetastery? With just an encouraging word, now and then, he is certain to blossom into one of our most beloved noet laureates of all time.


Re: slow nails
Posted by: Noloco (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: October 24, 2002 02:35PM

Mr Yuck i was trying to be nice and i doubt this poem is what you said,but if you are speaking the truth well im sorry.

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: slow nails
Posted by: mr yuck (---.tnt2.fredericksburg.va.da.uu.net)
Date: October 25, 2002 02:03PM

i seriousy do not give THE Slightest Fuck WHO it makes sense to.it makes sense to me.you just have to open your mind wide enough...how do you define abstract JAY?

thanks dm


Re: slow nails
Posted by: Noloco (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: October 25, 2002 02:28PM

smiling smiley

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice




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