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It takes a screwed up parent to raise a brilliant child
It takes an adult who acts a child to bring up a child who is mature
It takes evil to find good
It takes wrong to find right
It takes deception to find truth
It takes time to find patience
It takes stupidity to find brilliance
I am stronger for it all
Never to be forsaken
I carve my path in deep
I shall not be shaken
I go to make decisions
They shall be my own
And he shall never see
All the right choices I make.
+Sargirl+
nice poem i love it
-andy
Sarah nice, but i see it as if someone could be the opposite great read. Im sorry i missed this.
"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice
Sargirl---well done!! Gives me hope as a parent---as I have acted up thru the years---inspite of it--my children will prevail..........good one!! Ell
Nol, I know what you mean, but i was noticing a pattern of silly parents and mature children in my school. 
Me included!
lgreen, every one makes mistakes, but if love is there it's all godd!
Thanks to you both!
Sargirl
snark?
????
Yes, truth!
yea, that is what this poem is
truth
words are false, but they are the only thing that enableus to know the truth
the first 2 lines make me a one year old einstein
No wonder my children are so smart. JP
OY! The truth she speaks! The truth! Its wunnerful! Ummmmm, yeah. snark, are you calling yourself brilliant? 
Lizz
lol
I think he did!
OY?
My goodness!
She has gone north!
Sargirl
I've been saying oy since half my class got back from argentina, and you JUST noticed?? I guess it came back with them. muchas smoochas.
Lizz
I like muchas smoochas!
I noticed it before, but was far to lazy to comment!
git yo ass on messenger, gurl!
Lizz
i am!
exuuuuuse me!
But are you ignoring me?!
I'm not getting you!
Who are you?
Lizz
I can't get you! I'm talkin ta sargirl2002! You're not there!
Lizz
lizz, stop makin fun o me!!!!!!!!!!
yer meeeeeeeeeen (SNIFF!)
lmao someone got the name i been chasin a porn bot and got lost on yahooo haha
"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice
Sarah,
I don't really want to say this, but I feel that I should.
The poem is too pedatic with the beginings of the lines being nearly all the same.
How about something like this instead?
It takes an eccentric parent to raise a brilliant child,
a perpetual Peter Pan to bring up a child who is mature;
Only with evil, will a child understand what is righteous,
and without deception, there would be no truth.
In order to know patience, one must suspend time,
and only the foolish, stumble upon true genius;
I am stronger for it all, never to be forsaken
I carve my path deep, and I shall not be shaken
When I make decisions, they shall be my own
And he shall never know what choices I have made.
+Sargirl+
That's a good, fleshed out version, Bruce, but it strikes me as a bit more verbose towards the beginning than Sargirl is. You are really quite verbose Is there another word for that? It's getting repetitive...wordy. There we go.
Lol, Nolon, that's great..!
Catch ya lata guys,
Lady of the Night
Actually Megan, my version should be LESS verbose, because I actually chopped some lines that I felt had already been covered. So thar! Thhhhhhhhhhhpt.
And if it looks MORE verbose, maybe that is because I made the poem wider. Sheesh, ya just can't win with this gal. She bitches that you only use 3 mords in a line, and then when you make lines longer she calls you verbose. The nerve of this wench! So sassy! :-D
Brucefur
ahem; that should be WORDS, not MORDS. Sorry.
hmmmm
I like your version, but it almost seems like a diffrent poem....
Ah well!
Thanks Bruce!
Sargirl
It is a different poem Sargirl, and I apologise for that, but I could find no other way to give you an example of what I was suggesting, and still get rid of all of those horrendous "It takes," lines.
I never intended for you to keep my version, I was mainly hoping that it would help to guide you in a reworking of the piece. I think it could be powerful... with some effort on your behalf.
It does of course work as it is, if your intent was to give us something to aid us when we have insomnia.
nods Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.
Maybe i should swear in it a bit.
God damn....
I am a person, not a piece of property to be fed-exed from parent to parent when they want me too.
I am sorry Sarah, I didn't mean to be callous, I was actually just kidding with you there about the insomnia bit, and about how bad it was. Are you going through a tough time?
Brucefur
Sargirl,
Your version is poignant.
One hopes these to be the exception and not the rule but unfortunately at times it seems that “true wisdom (only) comes from pain”.
-Squire
Brucefur,
Your version is especially powerful and taciturn. ;-)
-Squire
Thanks squire!
Yes Bruce, the last couple of days have really stunk. I don't really want to get into it right now because I feel like I am at a transition point, so at least my perspective may shift.
Nothing serious, just the usuall junk.
Thanks for worrying!
Sargirl
Maybe this will cheer you up!
the last couple of days have really stunk.
Nothing serious, just the usual junk!
An original Sargirl Poem
Of course I worry about you Sarah. Ask Nutmeg, it is what I do best!
BIG HUGS
um, that would be my grandmother again. Meddlesome old coot, just won't stay in the ground! ;-)
Her loving grandson,
Brucefur