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It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 02:29PM

It takes a screwed up parent to raise a brilliant child
It takes an adult who acts a child to bring up a child who is mature
It takes evil to find good
It takes wrong to find right
It takes deception to find truth
It takes time to find patience
It takes stupidity to find brilliance
I am stronger for it all
Never to be forsaken
I carve my path in deep
I shall not be shaken
I go to make decisions
They shall be my own
And he shall never see
All the right choices I make.
+Sargirl+


Re: It takes
Posted by: Andy (24.147.115.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 02:51PM

nice poem i love it


-andy


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 03:20PM

Thank you!
Sargirl


Re: It takes
Posted by: Noloco (209.142.182.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 10:20AM

Sarah nice, but i see it as if someone could be the opposite great read. Im sorry i missed this.

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: It takes
Posted by: lgreen (12.252.116.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 12:00PM

Sargirl---well done!! Gives me hope as a parent---as I have acted up thru the years---inspite of it--my children will prevail..........good one!! Ell


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 01:46PM

Nol, I know what you mean, but i was noticing a pattern of silly parents and mature children in my school. smiling smiley
Me included!
lgreen, every one makes mistakes, but if love is there it's all godd! smiling smiley
Thanks to you both!
Sargirl


Re: It takes
Posted by: Snark? (67.24.196.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 02:32PM

truth


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 02:34PM

snark?
????
Yes, truth!


Re: It takes
Posted by: Snark (67.24.197.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 09:20PM

yea, that is what this poem is
truth
words are false, but they are the only thing that enableus to know the truth


Re: It takes
Posted by: Snark (67.24.197.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 09:27PM

the first 2 lines make me a one year old einstein


Re: It takes
Posted by: JP (207.43.74.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 10:14PM

No wonder my children are so smart. JP


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 03:34PM

smiling smiley
lol


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:51PM

OY! The truth she speaks! The truth! Its wunnerful! Ummmmm, yeah. snark, are you calling yourself brilliant? winking smileywinking smiley
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:53PM

lol
I think he did!
OY?
My goodness!
She has gone north!
Sargirl


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:54PM

I've been saying oy since half my class got back from argentina, and you JUST noticed?? winking smiley I guess it came back with them. muchas smoochas.
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:56PM

I like muchas smoochas!
I noticed it before, but was far to lazy to comment!
smiling smiley


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:58PM

git yo ass on messenger, gurl!
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 06:59PM

I am!


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:00PM

talk to meeeee!!
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:01PM

i am!
exuuuuuse me!
But are you ignoring me?!


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:03PM

I'm not getting you!
Who are you?
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:04PM

I am sargirl2002


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lizzy (64.175.238.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:06PM

I can't get you! I'm talkin ta sargirl2002! You're not there!
Lizz


Re: It takes
Posted by: Snark (67.25.108.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 09:36PM

lizz, stop makin fun o me!!!!!!!!!!
yer meeeeeeeeeen (SNIFF!)


Re: It takes
Posted by: Noloco (209.206.158.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 06:46AM

lmao someone got the name i been chasin a porn bot and got lost on yahooo haha

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 07:45AM

Sarah,

I don't really want to say this, but I feel that I should.
The poem is too pedatic with the beginings of the lines being nearly all the same.

How about something like this instead?

It takes an eccentric parent to raise a brilliant child,
a perpetual Peter Pan to bring up a child who is mature;
Only with evil, will a child understand what is righteous,
and without deception, there would be no truth.
In order to know patience, one must suspend time,
and only the foolish, stumble upon true genius;
I am stronger for it all, never to be forsaken
I carve my path deep, and I shall not be shaken
When I make decisions, they shall be my own
And he shall never know what choices I have made.

+Sargirl+


Re: It takes
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 08:19AM

That's a good, fleshed out version, Bruce, but it strikes me as a bit more verbose towards the beginning than Sargirl is. You are really quite verbose winking smiley Is there another word for that? It's getting repetitive...wordy. There we go.

Lol, Nolon, that's great..!

Catch ya lata guys,
Lady of the Night


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 08:38AM

Actually Megan, my version should be LESS verbose, because I actually chopped some lines that I felt had already been covered. So thar! Thhhhhhhhhhhpt.

And if it looks MORE verbose, maybe that is because I made the poem wider. Sheesh, ya just can't win with this gal. She bitches that you only use 3 mords in a line, and then when you make lines longer she calls you verbose. The nerve of this wench! So sassy! :-D

Brucefur


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 08:39AM

ahem; that should be WORDS, not MORDS. Sorry.


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.198.55.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 10:00PM

hmmmm
I like your version, but it almost seems like a diffrent poem....
smiling smiley
Ah well!
Thanks Bruce!
Sargirl


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 09, 2002 05:50PM

It is a different poem Sargirl, and I apologise for that, but I could find no other way to give you an example of what I was suggesting, and still get rid of all of those horrendous "It takes," lines.

I never intended for you to keep my version, I was mainly hoping that it would help to guide you in a reworking of the piece. I think it could be powerful... with some effort on your behalf.

It does of course work as it is, if your intent was to give us something to aid us when we have insomnia.


nods Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 09, 2002 09:22PM

Maybe i should swear in it a bit.
God damn....
I am a person, not a piece of property to be fed-exed from parent to parent when they want me too.
sad smiley


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 02:31AM

I am sorry Sarah, I didn't mean to be callous, I was actually just kidding with you there about the insomnia bit, and about how bad it was. Are you going through a tough time?

Brucefur


Re: It takes
Posted by: Squire (12.77.148.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 03:33AM

Sargirl,
Your version is poignant.

One hopes these to be the exception and not the rule but unfortunately at times it seems that “true wisdom (only) comes from pain”.


-Squire


Re: It takes
Posted by: Squire (12.77.148.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 03:34AM

Brucefur,
Your version is especially powerful and taciturn. ;-)

-Squire


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 03:41PM

Thanks squire!
Yes Bruce, the last couple of days have really stunk. I don't really want to get into it right now because I feel like I am at a transition point, so at least my perspective may shift. winking smiley
Nothing serious, just the usuall junk.
smiling smiley
Thanks for worrying!
Sargirl


Re: It takes
Posted by: Alice McGaw (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 01:45AM

Maybe this will cheer you up!

the last couple of days have really stunk.
Nothing serious, just the usual junk!

An original Sargirl Poem


Of course I worry about you Sarah. Ask Nutmeg, it is what I do best!

BIG HUGS


Re: It takes
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 04:24AM

um, that would be my grandmother again. Meddlesome old coot, just won't stay in the ground! ;-)

Her loving grandson,
Brucefur


Re: It takes
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 02:22PM

lol
smiling smiley
big hugs




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