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Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 04, 2002 12:23PM

"Untitled"

The stickyness of spider webs
Has wrapped itself around me.
My arms begin to tire
Of fighting and failing,
Fighting and failing.

A wraith of all gone years
Forever stands behind me;
It once made me nervous,
But I'm used to it
I'm used to it.

Yet if all of our tomorrows
Are worth just one yesterday,
Then I shall pick up my pace
And keep on walking
Towards the light.

- Written...sometime earlier this year


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 04, 2002 07:06PM

Nutmeg,

I like it. Glad it wasn't written today, as it does kind of have a despondent undertone to it. I hope that you are doing okay, because like Angelito I AM a little bit worried about you.

Keep you chin up kiddo.

Love ya,
Brucefur


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 04, 2002 09:16PM

I like it!
The last stanza especialy caught my attention!
Very cool, as usuall!
I am not going to bug you about it, but if you ever want to talk to me about something, my inbox is always open.
smiling smiley
Oh, and Bruce, if she dosen't feel bad now....
Go read your own words, asking about being depressed is depressing.
Sargirl


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Noloco (209.142.182.---)
Date: October 04, 2002 11:42PM

Hehe my inbox is always open rotflmao Nice read as usual Lady a bit depressed ?

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Noloco (209.142.182.---)
Date: October 04, 2002 11:46PM

I forgot to mention at least it is untitled and ends well. Not like awww i can't believe that girl did that. You know like the other one hehe. I mean the other ended well it just was like you know emoticon with the mouth open heh.

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Quiet Dreamer (198.81.20.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 12:30AM

A little? Worried a little? Hell! I love her way too much to worry just a little. But the piece is good, although a bit depressing to me. Hon, my inbox is always open to you. You know that and my phone is always open when you're able to call. (unless someone is tying up the line)

Love to all and much more to Megan,
Angelito aka Quiet Dreamer


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 04:06PM

look at that!
I have started a trend


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (152.163.188.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 04:35PM

Lol, wow guys! Thanks! As of the last 6 months or so, I get depressed much less than I used to, thanks in part to Angelito, Bruce, J, Ian and others. Not that the rest of you are "other" but hey, there's lots! I truly do appreciate all you guys have done...I'm speechless! The other ppl I showed this to didn't like it that much, specifically my old English and present homeroom teacher. But thank you! I'm speechless.....

Love to all,
Lady of the Night, aka Megan


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 05, 2002 05:17PM

It just goes to show you the stupidity of some teachers.
smiling smiley
Sargirl


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Noloco (209.142.182.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 12:22PM

Sara girl call dell and tell them that one smiling smiley You can be with the DUDE YOUR GETTING A DEll!

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: lgreen (12.252.116.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 01:58PM

Lady---Good Write!! Even if a little "depressing". All poetry is just a moment in time--a reflection of our ups and downs---damn those downs--
You are not always dark--you have alot of people who care about you-obviously---hang on to them----------------hugs---Ell


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (152.163.188.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 02:03PM

Thanks much, Ell smiling smiley I try to keep up, but occasionally slip....ya know, when you live a life with such complications, you learn real quick who your real friends are...oddly, during my depressions, learning that my 'friends' weren't really friends didn't make my depression worse....I was just....disappointed? Not really sure....I've held two or three social statuses: rock bottom, top of the middle class, floater, and what I am now, pretty much to myself with a few acquaintences and one or two friends. And let me tell you.....it gets lonely at the top. That's the one that sucked the most....

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 06, 2002 03:48PM

Ah, there are two problems there:
I loooove MACS!
I would out shine that silly guy!

I shall have to email apple.com and tell them to hire ME!
tongue sticking out smiley
hehehe!
Sargirl


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 12:01AM

Welcome Lady to that happy middle ground, I hope that you stay here awhile.

Love you dearly, and I promise you that I will never give up on you... or Nora, Sarah and the others either.

You could fail all of your courses and take that GED, and I would still be proud of you.

Brucefur


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: JP (207.43.74.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 12:12AM

I think the repetition is quite effective. Liked it also. JP


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 02:35PM

Thank you, Bruce...thank you. As far as a happy middle ground...well, it's not always happy, but it's a middle ground......oi, this gets depressing! Computers are therapeutic, I come to them to get away from me, and oh boy...does it work? Noooo!

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 07:15PM

hmmm
fail all my classes?
I think it would be fun!
But my parents would have kittens!
hmmmm
I like A's, wish I had one in history.


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: lgreen (12.252.116.---)
Date: October 07, 2002 10:11PM



Ride the Ride


Life is just a ride
ups and downs
and middle grounds
similar to a roller
coaster;

When the ride
is slow and stops
You jump right off
and then you scoff
and stand in
line again.

lgreen 10/07/02


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 09:59AM

Lol, I like that, Ell. Very cool. May I print it out? Sargirl...don't fail all your classes! I hate knowing I'm failing..but it's a slippery slope. I am NOT coming back again this year, and I'm far too stubborn (or snooty) to settle for a GED. So I'm gonna get my ass back together and do my work!

Oh, speaking of which! I TRIED doing my chemistry last night on the phone with Angelito, but noooo.....first, he says 'Do your homework!' so then I start doing it, and naturally I'm a bit distracted (well...acting like it. In actuality I was fully paying attention to him), so he's quiet for a few seconds and without even knowing about my work says "Stop doing your homework!" so I teased im about it for awhile, then stopped and we had a great conversation grinning smiley Right Angelito? I love you!

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: lgreen (12.252.116.---)
Date: October 08, 2002 10:02AM

Of course. Lady, you may print out my poem--t'was for you...Ell


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Quiet Dreamer (198.81.26.---)
Date: October 09, 2002 02:57AM

Sara and Megan, do not fail your classes. It sucks. Take it from someone with firsthand experience. Believe me, I know.

I mean do your homework when you're not talking to me, hon! And yes we had a great conversation! grinning smiley

Love to all, but more to Megan,
~Angelito, aka Quiet Dreamer


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 09, 2002 09:01AM

sunny smirk Looky what I got guys!! Dum dum dum!!!!!!! Angelito!

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: JP (207.43.74.---)
Date: October 09, 2002 09:54AM

Another comment. I thought it was hopeful and determined rather than depressing. If one can acknowledge one's frailties, then one can choose to do the best they can with them. JP


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 09:38AM

Bravo, JP. You understand what many may never know...kudos to you.

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 05:47PM

too cute!
Oh, and I am not gonna fail my classes!
I think that history is my only non a.
winking smiley
Sargril


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 06:10PM

Pffft! At least somebody's smart AND does their homework! Kudos to you smiling smiley

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 10, 2002 06:26PM

smiling smiley
thanks!
But the reason that history isn't so hot may have to do with the paper I still haven't done! winking smiley
Sargirl


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 04:15AM

Sargirl go do your homework, Nutmeg, you too, and while you are at it, you can write a hundred lines of "I am the smartest cookie to roll off of the Cookie truck!"

love,
Brucefur


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Quiet Dreamer (198.81.26.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 06:19AM

I'm the smarter cookie grinning smiley

Love to all and more to Megan,
Angelito, aka Quiet Dreamer


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Brucefur (24.67.253.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 06:26AM

Yes QD, you are undeniably the Smartass cookie :-P

Brucefur


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Lady of the Night (209.222.212.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 03:03PM

I can't write "I am the smartest cookie to roll off the Cookie Truck" for two reasons. One, I'd be too smart to fall off the darn thing. Two, Angelito's smarter than me. smiling smiley And yes, he is quite the smartass Look But hey, that's why I love him kiss for Angelito

Lady of the Night


Re: Another Untitled
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: October 11, 2002 04:45PM

i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
i am the smartest cookie period!
ecetera
ecetera
ecetera
and so forth!
grinning smiley
Sargirl




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