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She
Posted by: Moon (63.232.164.---)
Date: September 18, 2002 04:44PM

She creates me.

Breathing life into
my empty soul.

Trying, always trying
to sustain me.

Fearfully realizing
the futility of it all.

Who could sustain me?
If I never could?





Ok so this is a relatively old piece. I was just looking for outside opinions. Decided to start here since I really enjoy the pieces on this site.
Thanks.


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Re: She
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.207.---)
Date: September 18, 2002 10:50PM

trying should have it's own line
I like it
I loove the moon
smiling smiley
Hi!
Sargirl


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Re: She
Posted by: skye (128.138.21.---)
Date: September 19, 2002 05:19AM

i like this, it's simple but meaningful. yeah, that's all. winking smiley

skye


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Re: She
Posted by: les712 (68.185.73.---)
Date: January 25, 2013 03:35PM

I like the simplicity of this one, good job, Moon.

Les


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Re: She
Posted by: les712 (68.116.84.---)
Date: January 27, 2013 11:33PM

bump


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Re: She
Posted by: Gwydion2 (99.199.110.---)
Date: February 03, 2013 03:13PM

beautifully succinct.


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Re: She
Posted by: frost42_24 (208.54.40.---)
Date: February 04, 2013 08:09PM

I reLly like this and the tone reminds me of one of my fave poets


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