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am i home yet?
Posted by: social disorder (---.ia3.marketscore.com)
Date: August 26, 2002 02:15AM

what day is it?
what time is it?
ive been in this place too long.

so who am i?
and what am i?
and why the hell are things so wrong?

afraid to look,
ahead of me.
afraid to see my future fade.

afraid to start.
afraid to fall.
and im stuck with the choice iv made.

they all say,
that ill be fine,
but this is all too hard for me.

so now i turn,
and face the sun,
and crawl back home on bloddy knees.

but where is home?
im lost again.
and when i get there will i even stay?

i turn back around,
and fuck it all,
i never liked that hell-hole anyway.

so now i start,
begin with you.
to find a place to rest my head.

but i cant find,
where i should be,
so i rest myself in you instead.

and this is home...
replies appriciated.


Re: am i home yet?
Posted by: Sargirl (---.maine.rr.com)
Date: August 26, 2002 09:17AM

i like this, you made the transition form questions to phrases very smoothly. It is a great poem in all respects I can see!
Sargirl




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