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Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.193.---)
Date: August 22, 2002 08:52PM

Here are two poems about the same thing! It is a painting of a sunrise.
Hope you like!
Sargirl
P.S. I even spell checked them!

Morning
Sunrise over the open sea?
I can't tell what you’re supposed to be.
Every brush stroke a contradiction.
Where did you start this depiction?

Lime green water melts with solid white sun.
Two black crows, flying off to have some fun
Bright orange flowers, just opening up to day
Triple colored sunrise’s tries to find its way
Morning


Blue
Purple
Red,
Yellow
&
Orange
Sky in brush strokes

Two
Black
Birds
Soaring
high

Liquid
Lime
Dusted
With sun

White!
Sun
Upon buds

Opening
To
Light

!Fire!
Orange
Red
Paint

Atop
Green
Stems
In the water


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 22, 2002 09:21PM

I loikes it! But I gotta say I like thi first one better than the second. The second was too choppy smiles!
Lizz


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.193.---)
Date: August 22, 2002 09:28PM

Yea, but I felt like wirting both! Thanks Lizz!
Sargirl


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.193.---)
Date: August 22, 2002 09:32PM

*writing, sorry
where is everybody? it is *:30 on a thursday! waz up w/ this?
sargirl


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 22, 2002 11:29PM

*:30?


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Lady of the Night (66.231.194.---)
Date: August 22, 2002 11:48PM

Sargirl -

I liked the first better than the second, too. Umm...did you mean for the first line to be a question? And in the last one, it should be "Triple colored sunrises try to find their way" or "Triple colored sunrise tries to find its way." One or the other smiling smiley

- Lady of the Night


Re: Sunrises come in two's
Posted by: Sargirl (24.194.193.---)
Date: August 22, 2002 11:48PM

8:30, now it is 10:55 here, but this place has been desolate for HOURS. oh well!
sargirl




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