she broke my heart
just before dusk
time and again
on every scale

then i let her go

call me sometime
she laughed

it was raining

your style is interesting. i like that it's different. this is my favorite of what you've submitted so far. i like that you can say so much with simple words. fabulous

skye

thats me in gerneral, simple and a bit primitive.....i like this forum too by the way....like your poems as well.....very intricate....delicately composed.....


gards from tetriano

it was nice but it just it seems you said that she broke your heart then laughed and said to call you sometimes now she might have meant that really but it did seem sarcastic and that is what i expected it to be good write like skye said short and meaningful it reminded me of my freind and the girl that dumped him on his bday and then it seems she just laughs at him all the time long story

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice

I like rain, i like this poem, i like books...
yup
Sargirl