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I Love You
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 12, 2002 11:10PM

I dont know what to say about this one, draw your own conclusions, but I think its pretty self explanatory.
Lizz

What if I were to say
I love you

What if I were to say
That every minute of every hour of every day
I've been thinking
Of you.

What if I were to say
That I fell
Into the long dark well
Of your eyes
Long ago

And what if I were to say
I don't want to climb
Back out.
I'm content to drift
In a sea of chocolate
Of hazel, of coffee...
I'm content.

What if I were to say
That even though I have climbed out of your well
Even though the earth
Is hard beneath my feet
Once again...
I still love you
I will always love you
There will always be a peice of you
In me.

And if
On long winter nights
When all the world looks black
You should ever want me
Just reach into the well
Behind your eyes
And I will be there.


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 13, 2002 01:54AM

Lizzy, What if I were to say that this poem is great. jhs


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: M T (---.pk.shawcable.net)
Date: August 13, 2002 02:27AM

Lizzy, very nice.


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Thom (---.188.224.164.euc.wi.charter.com)
Date: August 13, 2002 07:25AM

Lizzy,
Eloquently beautiful, I think that sums it upsmiling smiley
T.K.


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 13, 2002 12:12PM

Thanks guys! I always love to hear comments, good, bad an ugly. Not that theres anything here but good... Which Im not complaining about...
I just thought that poetry was the only way to describe this particular feeling. Thanks for reading it!
Lizz


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: ~J (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 14, 2002 02:29AM

super dee duper, as usual. makes me think of mexico...sad...miss them...yes both of them...actually...makes me miss the bubbles...sad.

~J


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 14, 2002 02:32AM

I agree, I dont miss Bubbles that much... I leave that to you. I miss the bubbles though.
Lizz


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Sarah Lenarz (---.mn.rr.com)
Date: August 14, 2002 03:26AM

sigh I have one of these people. love him and always will but not as it was. GORGEOUS Lizzy, It was just plain beautiful.
smiling smiley
Sarah


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 14, 2002 03:50AM

Its a nice thing, isnt it...
Lizz


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Grace (61.84.167.---)
Date: August 14, 2002 02:30PM

Hey Lizzy...I have a friend like this. And he may never know how I feel. But ur poem helped me remember that its all worth it being here for him. And one day I will hopefully be able to tell him.
Grace


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: Grace (61.84.167.---)
Date: August 14, 2002 02:30PM

Hey Lizzy...I have a friend like this. And he may never know how I feel. But ur poem helped me remember that its all worth it being here for him. And one day I will hopefully be able to tell him.
Grace


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Re: I Love You
Posted by: JT Southerland (---.bossig.com)
Date: August 14, 2002 02:35PM

i must say, this is a wonderful poem
it reminds me of my true love. thank you
~JT <:3~~~


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 14, 2002 03:16PM

Grace:
Go for it girl! If you love him, he has the right to know.

JT:
Im glad I could do that for you.


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 14, 2002 10:20PM

I love it girl! I miss having someone to talk to @ 2:00am!!!!!!!!!
Sargirl


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Re: Grace
Posted by: ~J (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 12:53AM

wow liz, you're so inspiring, i think i'll go get a car, drive all over the state til i find Bubbles and give him a nice big sloppy kiss...i can't drive...a minor roadblock...deffinately mexico though, and i said i missed the bubbles not Bubbles, and i'm surprised you miss him at all. : ) write another one.

~J


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Lizzy (---.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 02:59AM

Sarah:
I miss it too! I was listening to that CD that you hated so much and missing you and your mom like crazy! Glad you liked the poem.

Jex:
I was lying, I don't miss Bubbles at all. wellll, maybe I miss him just a little, but only for your sakewinking smiley I'll work on that other one for ya.

Lizz


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 15, 2002 12:19PM

Liz
What a coincidence, I miss my mom too!
She is hanging out with Kevin all day, and last night for that matter too. She is coming back this afternoon though. We went shopping yesterday, and I started crying for no reason. Oh well, at least I got cool clothes and a poem about a monkey out of it. Oh incidently, it was your dad who showed me that monkey!
Sargirl


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 01:00PM

Cute! I'll have to get him to show ME sometime! Is it at Grammas?
Lizz


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Re: Grace
Posted by: Sargirl (---.try.wideopenwest.com)
Date: August 15, 2002 03:01PM

Noooooo. It is in alaska on some stupid cave wall!
Yea it's at grandmas!
Just ask him for a tour of the place, and he'll show you like thirty of them!
Sargirl


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 03:36PM

Alright alright already. I guess I'll have to go to alaska then winking smiley!
Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Brandon (---.we.client2.attbi.com)
Date: August 15, 2002 05:55PM

I could have sworn I had already added my praise of this piece here, but apparently not. So, well done. I enjoyed it much.

as a man thinketh in his heart, so is he


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ok.shawcable.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 06:26PM

Grace, Lizzy gave you great advice. Even if the worst happens, nostalgia is better than regret.

Jex? Is that J's name? If it is, I prefer it so much more than a simple letter. J is so much more than that ;-)

I liked the ending the best Lizz, even if Steve is a loser :-P


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 08:02PM

ha ha ha! I see I have some explaining to do! Ok, here goes, The poem is about my ex boyfriend JC, Steve is my cousin who I write poetry too and with. J's name is Jessie, but somewhere along the line she picked up the nickname Jex. She's been my best friend since age 4 or so. So, all cleared up I hope! Oh, and I liked the ending the best too, that and the chocolate hazel coffee eyes part, but that's because I like food.
Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ok.shawcable.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 09:09PM

Apologies to Steve!

Chocolate, coffee flavoured eyeballs; yummy!

Amendment as fallows: JC is a loser ;-)

Nice to meet you Jessie, Jex, J! Where is YOUR profile?


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Jack (---.southg01.mi.comcast.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 11:05PM

Probably on the side of her face.


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 15, 2002 11:29PM

Yes, go to Alaska. Get eaten by a bear and leave my all of your dead husbands money. (He got eaten by it trying to save you) all for the sake of the monkey.
Sargirl


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Brucefur (---.ok.shawcable.net)
Date: August 15, 2002 11:52PM

laughing hysterically Jack, you are too funny.

Brucefur


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 02:02AM

Uhhh, yeah sarah. First I'll have to marry... How about the loser JC? He was rich... Well, he will be, you can tell, and his dad is winking smiley. But I wouldnt do that even to go get killed for you. I just couldnt possibly. winking smiley

And Jack, I would say you're probably right. I would think.

Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: ~J (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 10:29AM

ahhh. i see i have been discussed in my abscence. well, i can actually explain where jex came from. our friend william can't spell so when he writes emails he exaggerates it, so my name was jecee (somewhat like jessie...well...i know, it's a stretch). i was typing it one time and i missed the c key and hit the x...thus jex. anyhoo. i'll change my profile since ya'll like it better (actually, i do too). my boyfriend (i.e. spens, bubbles, sunflash) doesn't like it. made him think of something weird. uh. great poem.

~J


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 16, 2002 02:55PM

All right. Fine. I'll just have to get money the normal way. sigh
Sargirl


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 04:11PM

Why dont YOU just marry money, Sargirl, if your mom wont?
Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Stephen Fryer (---.cache.pol.co.uk)
Date: August 16, 2002 05:16PM

Look: I know I'm having a bad day. And I don't want to be crabbier than normal. But some time back, somebody said, shame there isn't a chatroom on this site. Maybe so, maybe not.
Next thing, lo and behold, the User Submitted Poetry forum has changed into ... a chat room. Crabbily, I say - I am not interested in what you kids are up to. I am very interested in your poetry. I know the poetry is rooted in the experience, but I can enjoy Shakespeare's sonnets without too much detail of what he was doing and with who and where and whether they enjoyed it and what they had for breakfast next morning. So, spare me the chat. Because it's getting so I don't want to visit the forum anymore: my time is limited, and too much trivia is bad for me.
Grump. Humph. Spraint.

Stephen


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Jack (---.southg01.mi.comcast.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 05:41PM

Hear Hear


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 09:24PM

Ok, how about if you just read the poems? I see no reason why you should feel obligated to read all the other comments. If you have something to say about the poem, then just scroll to the bottom of the page and do so. I agree that the subject of the comments is more often than not something other than the poem, and I also agree that this is not a great thing, but I think it just happens. You could save yourself the trouble and time wasting of reading the comments and go straight to comment on your own though. I will try to cut back on the chat.
Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Jack (---.southg01.mi.comcast.net)
Date: August 16, 2002 09:43PM

Lizzy-


It was nothing personal, I'm sure. Stephen is just a crotchety old fart, and I am a curmugeon with a D!


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 16, 2002 09:45PM

Oh hell! The whole idea is to be able to discuss stuff! If you want to skip the lenghty ones than go ahead! I for one appreciate the inlightening conversations I take part in here.
Sargirl


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Sargirl (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 16, 2002 09:55PM

Oh and I am all ready sure I will mary for money, looks, inteligence, and love all in one. yea right
Sargirl


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 17, 2002 03:03AM

Sarah:
I'm sure you will too, oh, and already is one word one L winking smiley. Tee hee hee.

Jack:
Thank you.

Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: bobo (---.tampabay.rr.com)
Date: August 17, 2002 04:10AM

I really liked the poem, Lizzy, and I don't go much for love poems in general. This one has some very good word pictures and keeps moving. It doesn't rely on soppy (is that a made up word-- sorry Jay--but when you typo and misspell as much as I do made up words are a saving grace) sentiment and it is sharp.

bobo


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 17, 2002 04:19AM

Not sure if its a made up word, but I think it is. I agree about love poems though, but that was how this relationship was, sort of to the point, not much mushy stuff. I admire that sometimes.
Lizz


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Re: I love you
Posted by: silent siren (---.ber.dial.de.colt.net)
Date: August 18, 2002 12:26PM

tune added at once with smile
singing siren


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Re: I love you
Posted by: Lizzy (---.okld03.pacbell.net)
Date: August 18, 2002 04:14PM

ahhhhh. I do SO love the comments I get on this site! Thanks guys!
Lizz


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