Hello this is my first time posting on here. Let me know what u think, please.


As I look above into the dark sky, I see the beautiful stars. I wonder are you looking down on me. Are you watching over me like a guardin angel? You always said you would take care of me no matter what. So, are you my guardin angel? I think you are. Sometimes I wonder though, because of the way my life as been. But are you just making me learn and to live my life by learning from my mistakes.


Bear

Sorry Bear, I missed this one, and I believe that everyone deserves a response. Especially when they have requested one.
So here it is; I dislike wide poems, as I have stated before elsewhere, and I would strongly suggest breaking it down.
Poetry doesn't flow very well when it is written like a novel, so this is what I would suggest:

As I look above
into the dark sky,
I see the beautiful stars.

I wonder
are you
looking down on me.

Are you
watching over me
like a guardian angel?

You always said
you would take care of me
no matter what.

So,
are you my
guardian angel?

I think you are.

Sometimes I wonder though,
because of the way
my life as been.

But are you
just making me learn
from my mistakes?

Bear

I have modified it a little bit, but I tried not to lose your message in doing so. I hope that you approve. I certainly quite like it this way.

Brucefur

Bear, I agree with Brucefur, you should take on some of themore traditional forms in yor work. It reads so much better and clearer that way. Liked the thoughts. jhs