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As Stone
Posted by: Jay (---.yorkton.com.203.129.216.in-addr.arpa)
Date: August 09, 2002 01:08PM


I sleep with raven feathers
caressing my fingers
your breath a gentle breeze
whistling through me

singing lullabies

legs like ivy
twisted
into one vine

we entered this night together
when the air was warmer

I wear you now
like a sheet
fresh from a clothesline by the garden

its fragrance intact

let the bells ring
we are immovable

firmly cemented.


Re: As Stone
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: August 10, 2002 02:46AM

Jay, Thanks for sharing. Welcome to this site.jhs


Re: As Stone
Posted by: Sarah Lenarz (---.mn.rr.com)
Date: August 10, 2002 03:41AM

Jay-really liked both this one and "I see you growing up". THey both have a great flow to them and really clearly express how you feel- give us more! smiling smiley just one question, though- where does the title of this one come from? Sounds much more soft and loving than stone. Enlighten me?
smiles and welcomes
Sarah


Re: As Stone
Posted by: silent siren (---.dip0.t-ipconnect.de)
Date: August 10, 2002 02:02PM

Thumbs up!
siren


Re: As Stone
Posted by: Jack (---.eapplied.com)
Date: August 11, 2002 08:06PM

feathers fingers whistling lullabies ivy vine fresh clothesline fragrant bells




all this is delightful







then "cemented" lands with a THUD




waddaya think?


Re: As Stone
Posted by: JP (---.essex1.com)
Date: August 12, 2002 12:53AM

Jay, I loved the image of 'sheets fresh from the clothesline', that fresh, clean smell, that no fabric softener has ever been able to capture. JP


Re: As Stone
Posted by: Jay (---.yorkton.com.203.129.216.in-addr.arpa)
Date: August 15, 2002 10:20AM

Sarah: To me, stone is something very silent and peaceful. A good example is a sculpture in a garden; a very quiet place.
For two people to lie together as stone, implies that they are at peace.

Thank you to everyone who has read and appreciated my poems.
I look forward each morning to reading all of the comments.

Jay


Re: As Stone
Posted by: les712 (68.116.81.---)
Date: March 12, 2013 02:28PM

bump




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