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wind
Posted by: Joe (---.speed.planet.nl)
Date: July 26, 2002 12:10PM

wind



winds of the past fly
through the glass of time
as forebearers
of future's glance
looking back in fear
where people hide
in darkblue storms
of thundery rain

thirsty for time
they walk in darkness
through the hot sands
of an hourglass
in guilty shame
for not listing to the wind
that shows the way
through their mortal
and hasty life



;ó)x

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Re: wind
Posted by: silent siren (---.ber.dial.de.colt.net)
Date: July 28, 2002 12:58PM

Should it be "listening" instead of listing?
lol,
siren


Re: wind
Posted by: Joe (---.speed.planet.nl)
Date: July 28, 2002 01:06PM

[.... Should it be "listening" instead of listing? ....]

yep.

;o)x

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Re: wind
Posted by: silent siren (---.ber.dial.de.colt.net)
Date: July 28, 2002 01:14PM

Okay, let me try to interprete:
Time passes in the first four lines, whereas the winds of time are the lyrical subject. Now do THEY look back in fear or do YOU do (as if you were the narrator of the poem)?
Second stanza is clear, people hasting around with the time is money attitude that can bring so much sadness.

Right?
siren


Re: wind
Posted by: Joe (---.speed.planet.nl)
Date: July 28, 2002 02:11PM

;o)x

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Re: wind
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: July 28, 2002 03:12PM

Joe, Nice philosophical tone to it. Thought it was good. jhs


Re: wind
Posted by: les712 (68.116.81.---)
Date: February 21, 2013 11:02PM

We don't get many people from the Netherlands anymore, sadly.

Les




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