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O Father of Mine
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.megalink.net)
Date: June 23, 2002 05:58PM


Expect perfection
Demand respect
Oppress the kids
Then say you're sorry--
But only when
It's good for you.

I scream at you,
My cry for help.
Voice falling on
Deaf ears.
You block my words
As "disrespect"
And chase me to my room.

Ten year old
Vaccuuming the floor
Like Daddy told him to.
Not good enough
Not perfection
Scream some more--
Hey, gets it done.

F*cking illness
Blinds you to the world
You don't see
What you do to us
You don't see our tears
You don't feel our pain
You say you love us
But you can't show us.

A few words to you,
O Father of mine.
If it's respect you demand
You'd best give us some
Because until you do
You will push us away
And one day, you will wake up
Alone
Angry
Crying

Like us.


June 23, 2002


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Brucefur (---.vc.shawcable.net)
Date: June 23, 2002 06:06PM

If you only aim for perfection, that will always be enough for me.

Love you greatly my little muse!

With boundless affection,

Brucefur


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.megalink.net)
Date: June 23, 2002 06:07PM

Okay, now I'm feeling kinda guilty....my father is a good man. He loves us, he takes care of us, he's pretty good to us. Just that his temper isn't in the best of shape, and also we think he has Alzheimer's, so....yeah. I give credit where credit is due. My father is a good man, and he's done the best that he can. Sometimes it's not enough, though...I care nothing for myself, but I fear for my brother.

- Lady of the Night


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: lgreen (---.client.attbi.com)
Date: June 25, 2002 05:13AM

Lady: Sometimes we are inspired by the pain of others-(brothers for instance)--and it brings out words that end up expressing our deep deep inside feelings. A lot of "good" people are unable to freely express their love and therefore it can be said that they did the best they were able.
Sometimes- understanding just that is phenomenal...do not feel guilty
for addressing your reaction to your father's actions. Keep on posting...
:-) lgreen


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Mr yuck (---.nas22.vienna1.va.us.da.qwest.net)
Date: June 25, 2002 11:23AM

I like


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: jazzy (---.charternc.net)
Date: June 25, 2002 11:46AM



Dear Lady:

Thanks for ever being so gracious as to open your "heart" and "soul" to us unabashedly; trusting that we are loving and worthy enough to truly appreciate the precious gems of emotion and spirit with which we're blessed to behold! Keep on "sparkling!" winking smiley

Namaste,
Jazzy


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.megalink.net)
Date: June 25, 2002 01:23PM

All -

Thank you for your thoughts and replies. lgreen, your words were comforting to me, and I appreciate them. I do understand where he's coming from, that's what keeps me from going insane winking smiley But again, my brother can't always see it, and he's so much like me. Young, full of life with the thought that yes, the world IS good, and that as long as you're nice and respectful, everything will be great! Generally, that is the case, however...it's not always like that. Ach, this is depressing! Lol.

Jazzy, again, your replies are much appreciated. I look forward to your thoughts on different pieces, you do so well to express them, and certainly bring light to these forums. Thanks again smiling smiley

- Lady of the Night


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Stephen Fryer (---.cache.pol.co.uk)
Date: June 25, 2002 05:45PM

It's hard work being a father - believe me! - and I hope yours manages to cope with it. You have a level head on young shoulders - but know if and when the time comes to seek help, and seek it.

I know e e cummings is old hat now, but in my youth I drew great comfort from "my father moved in dooms of love".

In friendship

Stephen


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.megalink.net)
Date: June 25, 2002 06:31PM

Was this a poem? If so, is it short enough to post here? If not, where can I find it?

- Lady of the Night


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: Stephen Fryer (---.cache.pol.co.uk)
Date: June 26, 2002 06:27AM

[www.poets.org] />
And, for my mother:

[www.plagiarist.com] />
(Come and play on the Plagiarist site. We need wise persons there.)

Stephen


Re: O Father of Mine
Posted by: silent siren (---.ber.dial.de.colt.net)
Date: June 30, 2002 05:51AM

Milady,
certainly full of power and force...you can feel that anger. I am not good in meddling into personal matters, but try to make life easier for your brother.
No comments.
siren




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