this is a new one, though a little abstract I like it. please tell me what you think, be it good or bad...i really appreciate repsonses and suggestions, since it's so hard to remove yourself from what you write. thanks

how I swempt through crowds of fears
to find you at the door
and swept you aside, outside,
were waves of silence roll loud
but no other seas or tides dismay,
and I set our two by two trodding
through those tempting thoughts
of filling silence with space
--not so airy ‘a thing—
and we stumbled ever farther
‘till we found my car, and each other
face to face, with a world’s
dreamt dream in lace
--it’s not so airy a thing--
and we both knew
what would come with closed eyes
but in the darkness what are eyes?
the you and I’s?
so if you wish, blame me
for you rule my brazen car
and time’s told
that though the sky is filled with stars
who and I won’t get that far

don't have much to say about it other than that I liked it alot

thanks Mac--it's always nice to here someone say they enjoyed what you created.

for some wierd reason I have problems with "who" and "you," i guess because they're euphonically almost the same? anyway, the last line should be "you" instead of "who." and in the fourth line the "were" is mising an "h"...just notes from a perfectionist thanks again for reading. J

I smile...good stuff.
K.o.w.!
siren