Shroud

Fading into dismal emotions,
Disappearing deep into the darkness,
Completely enveloped
By emptiness--
Protecting and Concealing
Emptiness.


It is a bit short. But i couldn't think of anything to add.

Shroud

dark place.....good start---put on the back burner--maybe later something will come to you--lgreen

Hum. What does this poem suggest about its author...are you, too, one with too heavy problems? Seen so much of that recently...
siren

Yeah, preety much. Poetry is my outlet, maybe when I hit happier times, I'll write happier poems.

Shroud

short and sweet i liked it

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice

Try to write a happy poem, there's so much sadness in this world we have to force ourselves out of it sometimes. Look to your friends. Here's a poem I wrote a long time ago, don't want to post it, but thought it might help. It's not very good, but I wrote it for a friend who helped me find my way out.
Long, long ago, or it seems that way
I decided to end my life one day.
The pain of the knife was welcome relief
From the pain of the soul, enveloped in grief.
I'm telling you this, only to show
How the scars can fade, and the soul can grow
Into the light, as God intended
With the help of others, whose lives He mended.
One step at a time with faltering feet
I grasped at the hands outstretched to meet
My own, and hung on tight
As they gently guided me back to the light
Of reason, and laughter, and loving, and care
Where heart answers heart
And prayer answers prayer.

Thankyou very much JP. Your poem is an inspiration to me. But most of all thankyou for caring. Right now, I'm just going through a tough spot in my life, and poetry is my safe way of getting out the frustration and depression. But once this is all over, I will definately write a happy poem.

With greatest thanks and best wishes,
Shroud

JP--see how sweet you are--and what a poem that is----where heart answers heart and prayer answers prayer--love it!!!!!!!!!!

Shroud---there is light at the end of the tunnel--but ah---we have to walk thru the tunnel first---it's ok-

somedays you eat the bear and somedays the bear eats you...

hang on tight....

lgreen aka mommajane

Here's a somewhat happier poem. Writing it actually made me feel better.

Breaking Through

Light breaks through the desolation,
Filling the emptiness,
Illuminating hope,
Guiding those lost in the darkness…
To return to life,
To restore thy soul,
To give a meaning to the hardship of living---
Light breaks through the desperation
Revealing the truth of mortality:
Only One life to live--
One chance to make it
Worthwhile.


Shroud

See! If you can't act, act as if. JP

"See! If you can't act, act as if."

I'm sorry, but I just can't swallow this baloney. Maybe I'm misunderstanding you, JP, but are you suggesting that we all be phoney? That we should smile even when we're sad? That we should bury our sorrows deep within us until we explode? Your words made me growl.
Sorry if I offended you, but I can't let potentially harmful advice like this slip by unquestioned.

Ah, the shroud of dismal emotions. A demon I am all too familiar with, but one I think is a necessary evil.

"Protecting and Concealing" -- yes, but also consuming. Dispair breeds dispair, and with time becomes ever deeper -- but hardly empty, if used constructively. Surely, some of the most beautful things in this world are sad (poetry, music, art, etc.).
Fortunately, dispair dies with time, even if it is to come back later in life.
Happiness has its place, but there is enough of it, and it only tells half the story.

Well of course you are entitled to your opinion. You said it yourself, 'despair breeds despair'. Maybe you also think Disraeli was full of baloney 'Action may not always bring happiness; but there is no happiness without action." and I think it was one of your countrymen who said 'A man is about as happy as he makes up his mind to be' So no, I'm not saying we should all be phoney, or bury our sorrows. If in the midst of our problems, we can put on a smile instead of a frown, maybe someone will smile back.

The mind is a place of its own;
it can make heaven like hell
and hell like heaven.

Don't know who said that, but it seemed to fit in here. Shroud, I am sure that you'll overcome those demons... you are created like that. Meanwhile, enjoy poetry and the small things in life - a burning fire, good food, and, if you have them, friends - e.g. us here ;-).
Keep on fighting!
siren

Shroud, my response to 'The Assyrian's' comment was in no way my response to you. I do not mean to negate the pain you feel or minimize your situation. I understand all too well, believe me. JP

Thanks everyone for your concern. I know hard times don't last forever. So I'd like to wish everyone a happy father's day.

Shroud

John Milton said that in "Paradise Lost":

The mind is its own place, and in itself
Can make a heaven of hell, a hell of heaven.

(That's a very appropriate quote to use, Siren.)

oops. not familiar with Angloamerican literature, it seems...
thanks.
siren

Shroud: Someone once said "Perception is 99% of our reality"
food for thought....sounds so simple....lgreen