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My Smile triology
Posted by: M (---.jetstream.xtra.co.nz)
Date: June 11, 2002 08:13AM

Perhaps not the best poetry I've ever written, but I like the way it tracks a kind of personal journey :-)

MY SMILE I
I use it like a bandaid:
I stick it firmly
Across my face
To cover my
Pain early 1999

MY SMILE II
It's made of plastic
And I keep it in a box
in my room.
Each morning I take it out
and put it on.
It's very lifelike, very convicing
People see that it's there
and smile
and go on thinking
that the world is good
and everyone's happy.
At night I take it off again,
ready for the morning.
But it doesn't seem to fit
quite as well these days,
and I wish it would stop
slipping off
for even I don't want to face
what's underneath. later 1999

MY SMILE III
It comes from a warmth
Within me
Which spreads through my being
So entirely
I can't help but smile
At any opportunity
Or even for no reason at all.
The bandaid
I have tossed away
For it no longer has pain to cover.
And the plastic grin
in a box
in my room
Gathers dust in a forgotten corner.
I need not dream
When life surpases them all
I need not pretend
Any longer
When reality is such a wonderful place.
And I believe
That the world is good
And I am happy. 18/3/2002

Emily, changer of stars


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: Mik (---.mel0410.mel.iprimus.net.au)
Date: June 11, 2002 09:07AM

beautiful!

what is it that helped change your outlook


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: silent siren (---.dip0.t-ipconnect.de)
Date: June 11, 2002 04:18PM

I would say

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is magic! Poet of the week's strongest aspirant! Smashing! Wonderful!

...if I wouldn't have to eat worms all the time.

silent siren

P.S.: ever tried thinking of them in a soup as kinda noodles? (slurp) winking smiley


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: JP (207.43.74.---)
Date: June 11, 2002 05:12PM

I like this one Em, may your soul grow and your smile continue.


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: June 11, 2002 07:44PM

M, Nice to see you are growing. It may not always be pleasant but it is always worthwhile and satisfying. Keep on smiling. jhs


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: M (---.jetstream.xtra.co.nz)
Date: June 13, 2002 12:47AM

Thanks for your comments guys :-) (Can't really tell if you're being sincere or sarcastic Siren, but I'll just be naive and pretend you're being sincere. Try a little apple mouse with them winking smiley
As for your question Mik: what is it that helped me change my outlook? - Well, first I went through some hard times and learnt some hard lessons. Then I slowly began to realise that I was a good person and that life was worth living, and I became grateful for the lessons I'd learnt. I began (as corny as it sounds) to love life and to love myself. Now I'm at a place where I feel completely content with what I look like, what I do and who I am, flaws and mistakes included. And just as I was reaching this point, I found love. I found that someone else could love me just as much, maybe more than I do. Someone who is happiest when I am around, and someone who makes me happy just having him in my life.
And now I just can't stop smiling. :-)

Emily, changer of stars


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: silent siren (---.dip0.t-ipconnect.de)
Date: June 13, 2002 02:12AM

The worms are sarcastic. The comment is sincere. Em, this IS good!
siren


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: Nolon (---.vp.centurytel.net)
Date: June 13, 2002 02:33AM

I Liked this poem and how it was in three parts nicely done keep up the great work

"To write something, you have to risk making a fool of yourself." Anne Rice


Re: My Smile triology
Posted by: lgreen (---.client.attbi.com)
Date: June 14, 2002 01:31AM

loved the journey--nicely done




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