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"I Love You"
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: June 10, 2002 04:04PM

"I Love You"

I love you once for yesterday,
I love you twice today,
I love you times infinity, in every single way.

I love you for your happiness,
I love you for your smile,
I love you for the way you laugh, making it all worthwhile.

I love you for your kindness,
I love your understanding, too,
I love you for all that we have--I love you for being you.

--Megan A. Clemmer

aka "Lady of the Night"


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: ~SARAH~ (---.maine.rr.com)
Date: June 10, 2002 04:24PM

Lady of the Night,
I like it. it is sweet, honest, and cute. However I dont like "in every single way." it seems a little awkward. I dont mean to stick my nose where it dosent belong, but did you write this for someone, or is it just something that came to you out of the blue?
Good Job!
Sarah


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: Lady of the Night (63.164.24.---)
Date: June 10, 2002 05:44PM

I don't like "in every single way" either. It was originally read the way it is now, except "in every single way" read "for all the days ahead." But, after I finished, I saw that it had an inconsistent rhyme scheme, so I tried to "fix" it. This is a work in progress...

And yes, it's written for someone in particular smiling smiley Written for someone named Angelito, a man who's very special to me. There's another (I think crappy) poem for him, called "Appreciations in Advance" that's posted on here. Neither of these do him justice, but I do prefer this one.

Thanks for your thoughts!

- Lady of the Night


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: Brucefur (---.vc.shawcable.net)
Date: June 10, 2002 06:11PM

This line is too long Meg;

I love you for the way you laugh, making it all worthwhile.


And why did you use that NAME? We have had this convo before dear!!!!!


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: J.H. SUMMERS (---.proxy.aol.com)
Date: June 10, 2002 06:43PM

Lady, Thought it was good. If it is a work in progress have you considered taking the 2nd half of each 3rd line and making them a 4th line? Just a thought. jhs


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: June 11, 2002 07:07AM

Brucefur -

Why is that line too long?

And I used that NAME out of sweet defiance to you! Part of me wondered what you'd say. Part of me was feeling stubborn and "snarky" if you will. But most of me figured "hey, somebody's gonna REALLY love this piece and try to STEAL it from me, so I'd better copyright it!!!"

Good enough for ya? winking smiley

JH -

I did think of that, actually. I may do that. Brucefur, if I did that, would it satisfy your pickiness of such a long line?!

Thank you all smiling smiley

- Lady of the Night


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: silent siren (---.dip0.t-ipconnect.de)
Date: June 11, 2002 02:14PM

Agree with Summers and love that simple, sweet poem!
siren


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: Brucefur (---.vc.shawcable.net)
Date: June 11, 2002 02:18PM

I also agree with JH; why not make them Quatrains?


Re: "I Love You"
Posted by: Lady of the Night (---.unet.maine.edu)
Date: June 11, 2002 02:22PM

Quahuh? If you mean turn them into 2 verses of 4 lines each, sure! I thought of doing that, but then thought the placement and appearance would be a nice change from my boring old ways tongue sticking out smiley

Thanks for the thoughts

- Lady of the Night




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