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Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: July 30, 2011 06:27PM

Minor Details before the Weekend

The childís cry
The airplane
The sky
The apartment door
To the formulation of the day

The taste of burnt pancakes
Between false teeth
To the origin
Of the specific

The rudder
Of noise
Beneath the kettle
Seeking metal
The penetration of morning

The dull emptiness
The window
Holding out
Holding in
Winterís errant fly
How long can he last without food or water?

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 07/30/2011 06:32PM by petersz.

Re: Trifles
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: July 31, 2011 08:00PM

not long...give him something to eat!

Re: Trifles
Posted by: les712 (68.185.70.---)
Date: August 05, 2011 11:24AM

Peter I like the way the stanzas sparsity reflects the subject matter of this poem.


Re: Trifles
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: August 05, 2011 08:52PM

me too.

thanks for commenting, Les.

Also, thanks for commenting, Sherry.

amo to all,


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