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Time Out of Mind Reprise [a lyric]
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: July 18, 2011 12:08PM

Time Out of Mind Reprise
for Dave

Itís Sunday morning time to
break into my dream
find what I remember
Iím supposed to seem
like all the other people
walking down the street
but got to tell you
I canít follow my feet
I can help you with sunshine
I can help you with rain
but the moon ainít rising
Iím all that remains.

I hear your voice slowly
taking up all the space
I look out the window
it ainít no disgrace
to feel like a rainbow
hide in the shade
I got to tell you now
I ainít getting paid
to ask you no questions
rehearse you no lies
Iím on the way out
the sunís on the rise.

I listen to strangers
I turn into dust
I lost my way yesterday
canít find the bus
to Tucson or Denver
to Boston or Maine
I still need a ticket
to get on a train
my hands are both empty
my head needs a pill
I feel like Iím broken
Iím still feeling ill.

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 07/18/2011 11:47PM by petersz.


Re: Time Out of Mind Reprise [a lyric]
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: July 19, 2011 11:04PM

Pete, the last stanza has real rhythm to it. Your favorite songwriter, Bob Dylan, would be honored by this verse.

Les


Re: Time Out of Mind Reprise [a lyric]
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: July 20, 2011 02:44AM

My friend Dave had been reciting lines from Dylan's The Highlands, noting how remarkable Dylan's ease with a prosaic line could be. When I gave Dave a copy of this he asked if I'd written any music for it. I said to myself, "I don't write music, unfortunately."

Thanks for sommenting, Les.




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