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comparison 1
Posted by: Fickledlife (72.130.17.---)
Date: June 30, 2011 01:41AM

whos side am i on? my ideals side with that of the passionate martyr, but only my ideals and words. then i am useless in contradiction? for my actions lie with the apathetic, and my soul with the melodramatic.

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i guess my mouth hypocrites my heart. i am the stump trying to grow after the saw's visit.i am the ember in cold space, the sun in a speckled galaxy. i am the sigh's breath laughing in a hurricane, the whisper lassoing amidst a twister. i am the tragic traffic light, any sorrows's green, allowing all grievance his buffet at me.

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So then have at me! Blind destiny is written in gods light ink? brutal fear. i fear nothing.

-with love


Re: comparison 1
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: July 07, 2011 04:09AM

third try to post a comment:

there are many wonderful phrases in this piece and I hope you will keep up the good work...
amo et avanti,

Peter


Re: comparison 1
Posted by: Fickledlife (72.130.17.---)
Date: July 07, 2011 01:40PM

thanks. im at my best when imagining insignificance. figures, right? ha. either way, thanks for the comments.

-with love


Re: comparison 1
Posted by: les712 (66.189.172.---)
Date: July 07, 2011 05:08PM

Good one Fickle, I agree with Pete, some nice wording here.

Les


Re: comparison 1
Posted by: Fickledlife (72.130.17.---)
Date: July 09, 2011 04:15PM

means a lot. thanks, les smiling smiley

-with love




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