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New York
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 29, 2011 09:38PM

you struck me in colors
a punch of red
to my cheeks
with merely a smile

I love the memory of your touch
if it is all I ever have
to explain the emptiness
I feel since your departure

there was at least a moment
where your tenderness
escaped your steel caged aggression
and made way to my heart

I will owe you for that
the way you forever changed me
permanently engraving a longing
never meant to be fulfilled

it scared the shit out of you
that I actually saw you
and with that
you chose retreat

but I will always see you
and recognize
the hidden kindness
in your soul


Re: New York
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: June 29, 2011 10:47PM

Sherry,

There is such tenderness in your poems...especially the ones filled with longing.

Peter


Re: New York
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 30, 2011 01:12AM

thanks, Peter. I feel like the clog may have dislodged. We'll see what comes out. I appreciate the encouragement.


Re: New York
Posted by: les712 (68.116.81.---)
Date: June 30, 2011 11:53AM

I like this one also Sherry, especially the last stanza.

Les


Re: New York
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 30, 2011 01:36PM

Thanks, Les...appreciate the feedback.


Re: New York
Posted by: Des_ire (218.1.178.---)
Date: July 01, 2011 12:19PM

Hey I couldn't keep quiet on this poem. It's so touching...


Re: New York
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: July 01, 2011 01:00PM

Thanks, Desire. I'm happy you enjoyed it enough to comment and I appreciate it.


Re: New York
Posted by: Fickledlife (72.130.17.---)
Date: July 02, 2011 07:58PM

warm. this is...really nice. may i ask where the title came from?

-with love


Re: New York
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: July 03, 2011 03:38AM

from the city in which it was inspired...thanks for the comments.




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