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wonder
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 27, 2011 12:39AM

Jesus, he's so beautiful
spreading across my horizon
like sun split skies at dusk

holding me closely with intent
I slip inside his heart
marking time as he breathes

like the wind rushing
through the corn fields
on a hot August night

he moves through me
and awakens me
like imagination stirs the world


Re: wonder
Posted by: les712 (68.116.88.---)
Date: June 27, 2011 11:54AM

One can feel the power of your faith here, Frosty. This is a great read.

Les


Re: wonder
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 27, 2011 01:29PM

thanks, Les.


Re: wonder
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: June 27, 2011 07:48PM

I thought it was a love poem. But then, when I was growing up, that's what I thought most hymns were.

good job, Frosty.

Peter


Re: wonder
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 27, 2011 08:28PM

Peter, it IS a love poem...the opening line does refer to Jesus, but the he is not Jesus, it's the object of the love poem...

In reading it again, I see how Les thought it was spiritual, as though, I was naming the he in the poem as being Jesus. That's what I love about poetry-the way it can mean something different to each reader.

thanks for taking the time,

Sherry




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