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technique
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 24, 2011 06:34PM

I am focused
but you don’t realize
looking at you
is like zooming in

for a tight shot
through the lens
my cap off
ready to capture
that perfect moment

first a pause
followed by
years of waiting

delayed flash
to darkness
and you never turn to smile…

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 06/25/2011 08:01PM by frost42_24.


Re: technique
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: June 25, 2011 02:59AM

wow


Re: technique
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 25, 2011 03:05AM

really?


Re: technique
Posted by: les712 (68.116.90.---)
Date: June 25, 2011 12:08PM

Nicely done, Frosty, I like the twist at the end.

Les


Re: technique
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 25, 2011 08:00PM

thanks, Les and Peter.


Re: technique
Posted by: larkinabout (81.157.185.---)
Date: June 29, 2011 04:44AM

Nice.

This sort of encompasses a captured moment poem in a captured moment poem, clever!


Re: technique
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: June 29, 2011 12:04PM

thanks, Larkin




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