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Paper Doll
Posted by: mg (108.6.15.---)
Date: April 21, 2011 10:57PM

I wish I were a cardboard doll,
Then you could make and shape me
dress me up, make me beautiful and sweet
loving, kind and polite

I wish I were a paper doll
had no emotions and no soul
You matter, others like you but not me
Then why not belong to you entirely?

I wish I were a cardboard doll
Without tears, feelings, heart and soul
You could tell me what to say and do
And I would be happy pleasing you


Re: Paper Doll
Posted by: les712 (68.116.86.---)
Date: April 22, 2011 02:58PM

Nicely done, MG, I think this is one of your best efforts. Keep writing.

Les


Re: Paper Doll
Posted by: mg (108.6.15.---)
Date: April 22, 2011 03:53PM

Les, thank you for reading and for the encouragement! I appreciate it.


Re: Paper Doll
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: August 14, 2011 01:22AM

"I am a Rock.
I am an Island."

although your poem expressed more pathos.


Re: Paper Doll
Posted by: mg (108.6.15.---)
Date: December 05, 2011 10:25PM

Thanks for reading and commenting Peter




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