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Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: October 06, 2010 01:18PM

The years lost taught me weakness

What corrupts and rules men

The mechinations of our inherited flaws

Now, now souls bend to me as any material

And I'm freer than I've ever been

Happier than I could have conceived

And the void waits, as it always does

Only, now I don't look away

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 10/06/2010 01:22PM by Mr. P.


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Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.36.---)
Date: October 06, 2010 01:21PM

Christ. This fucking place still has that problem with the spacing huh? Anyway, "mechinations" is intentional. Seems there isnt' a definition for it, rather machinations which means some form of scheming. My meaning is that mechanic-like actions of a given thing. Like, the internal mechinations of a watch.

So, how is everyone? And have we found a new site or what?


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Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: October 07, 2010 02:42AM

Perce,

This forum has been so neglected by the people who run it that most of the people we know don't even post here anymore. It is sad. Mary stayed a forum titled Hom Away from Home, where 14 people signed up, but not that many post regularly.

Me? I write my stuff as usual, post it on the two forums and hope someone will comment...when I can get back on this. Often I can't even sign on, which is what I think drove so many awya.

Peter


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Posted by: les712 (68.116.82.---)
Date: October 07, 2010 02:23PM

Percival, browsing through some online Thesauri, the closest word I could find that fits the context you've described is "dynamics", but "mechanics" would also work.


Les


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Posted by: Sarah_Ann (76.253.108.---)
Date: March 08, 2011 01:51PM

"And I'm freer than I've ever been
Happier than I could have conceived
And the void waits, as it always does
Only, now I don't look away"

I loved these lines, especially the strength in the last one.


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Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: March 23, 2011 05:17PM

I like the tone of this one...you seem inspired. Now I'm feeling inspired.


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Posted by: Humblefly (173.65.133.---)
Date: April 12, 2011 12:29AM

"And the void waits, as it always does
Only, now I don't look away"


Sounds like...

"The mechinations of our inherited flaws"

Seems to me any time I think I rid myself of one shortcoming another rears it's ugly head... Usually one I thought was long gone.

Thank you for this post.


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Posted by: hpesoj (68.197.144.---)
Date: April 20, 2011 04:47PM

Is this a new Percival emerging from the abyss? I like the hope thay you express in the last 2 lines....at least I interpret it as hope. Good reading.

Joe


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Posted by: Mr. P (71.236.132.---)
Date: April 21, 2011 05:20PM

Em. I've been quite busy lately. Where is everyone?


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Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: April 22, 2011 03:17AM

San Francisco


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Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 12, 2012 02:33PM

bump


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Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.28.---)
Date: January 17, 2012 08:33PM

Let her go Peter, it's time.


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Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 18, 2012 03:35PM

Nah, "It ain't time till I say it's time." I know I can be stubborn. Yet, I sent my poems out to other places that are not so accessible, to Mary's Home Away From Home Poetry forum, to lawsofform forum, to nicenet.org, to experiential-experimental lit., to my personal friends, etc. But that's ok, because writing the poems is what my job is. All the rest is up to someone else.

Still, I enjoy reading other people's work and much of the work on this forum repays repeated reading, so I don't might looking through what is here or even the distant hope that people with post work here that I haven't seen.


Meanwhile, I have a couple thousand books in this room. I have only read about 1/3 to 1/2 or them, so I won't go to sleep without reading material.

I hope life is not too much of a struggle for you, Percival, since I respect your ability to struggle and survive...the uiqueness it gives you. I see struggle every day in this city of a life-or-death kind, so I know my devotion to poetry is of a minor note sometimes compared with what my friends and relations and the strangers I converse with have to overcome personally.

amo et avanti,

Peter


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Posted by: Mr. P (24.20.28.---)
Date: January 18, 2012 05:35PM

Em, we have something rather special here. A very unique blending of personalities. Had I the power, I would see to this place's indefinite continuation. I'm happy you're doing this.

But I'm quite well, quite well infact. My demon's tamed, my biggest problem these days are laziness, cigarettes, and a sever deficiency of female companionship. Oh and tolerating my newly acquired teachers. I've finally started going to school.

But let me tell you a little secret, I've recently started a blog. It's an elaborate attempt to find a wife. I'd love to have you stop by. But a rule you must obey, no mentions of my identity or too much of our connection. Anonymity is very important to me. I'll send you the link via PM.

For anyone else, simply ask me and I'll PM the link.


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Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 19, 2012 03:21AM

I looked over your website. I like the way it is set up. It does need some development, as I am sure you already know. Female companionship is important. So is self respect, which you already have. I'm wracked out for now because of the needs of others, but when I catch up, I'll converse. And...I live in a big city because anonymity is very important to me. If I couldn't go to a place where no one has ever seen me, I think I would go nuts.

amo et avanti,

Peter


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Posted by: frost42_24 (98.227.4.---)
Date: January 29, 2012 02:02AM

Well for what it's worth, I'm still glad we're here and anyone who wants can always hit me up on my personal email too and send over goodies...

frost42_24@yahoo.com

PS Where's Jay?




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