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retro
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: September 01, 2010 09:48PM

the season brushes through me
cool
crisp like the night
I fell with you

delightful gray skies
and hearts
hand held
full of promises

we knew we'd never keep...


Re: retro
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: September 02, 2010 10:08PM

frosty,

'with' is a great word...perfect for the moment you portray.

Peter


Re: retro
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: September 02, 2010 11:15PM

thanks, Peter.


Re: retro
Posted by: les712 (66.189.173.---)
Date: September 09, 2010 09:40AM

Nicely done, you've captured the essence of the moment beautifully. Many developing poets write tons without saying as much as this.


Les


Re: retro
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: September 09, 2010 11:30AM

Les,
thanks for the support. I've just been in a long long funk and am trying to start writing something again...smiling smiley


Re: retro
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: September 19, 2010 10:34PM

Frosty,

We are all eager for you to get back on the horse, considering the years of interesting stuff you've posted here.

amo,

Peter


Re: retro
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: September 27, 2010 12:13AM

Peter, you're too kind.




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