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Butterflies
Posted by: apoemwriter (206.248.137.---)
Date: July 02, 2010 04:48PM

I wake up bent like a willow
after having surrendered to you

thoughts that once I didn't have
grew into thoughts I pushed away
and later became
thoughts I spoke to you

and you spoke them

and we were tangled
so tightly that
i didn't know where i ended
and you began

I was the drop of rain
running down your neck
across your shoulder and
down your back and
your skin responded

with a quiver and
another

and now

my tongue dry
my lips swollen
a tequila lump in my throat
my lungs empty

no breath remains
my love stripped bare
and everything i am
rests within your hands

the sky opened last night
and drenched us with
everything we knew lay
behind the darkness

and we discovered that
our mouths were made
for each other

we forgot in those moments
everything we were afraid of
and where pain used to be
now there are butterflies.


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: les712 (68.116.92.---)
Date: July 02, 2010 08:57PM

why the period at the end of the piece?

Les


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: Creepy (216.220.216.---)
Date: July 03, 2010 11:22AM

Means "BOOM I'm finished"

I actually like this one.


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: apoemwriter (68.171.235.---)
Date: July 11, 2010 08:26PM

I don't actually have an explanation for the period other than it is the end. Would you suggest leaving it out?


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: July 31, 2010 04:18AM

no breath remains
my love stripped bare
and everything i am
rests within your hands

the sky opened last night
and drenched us with
everything we knew lay
behind the darkness

these stanzas were the stand outs for me in a romance filled poem that I thoroughly enjoyed. I'm a sucker for this type of poetry.


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: April 21, 2011 05:27PM

BUMP...post more .


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: August 14, 2011 01:24AM

bump...ditto.


Re: Butterflies
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: August 22, 2011 01:18AM

ahhhh. I'm happy to see this one again.




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