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Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: aaron (24.22.31.---)
Date: February 06, 2010 05:49PM

Mathematics could write a song
and it would be perfect
in its symmetry and timing

The computer that sings it
each interval correct to the nearest
hundredth of a note
could even be programmed I suppose
with splices of random code
to dance seemly free and non-repeating
to a trumpet solo or fiddle

But this song, perfect on a page
could not make a boy fall in love
with Rosalita, as she dangles from a cliff

Losing her grip each time the sax
dissolves the refrain
into one more chance
to reach for her hand


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 06, 2010 08:15PM

I sometimes share the hope that what is human is unique, heartfelt, pure of the analytic thrust of that most human of all invventions: mathematics. I like your poem, even if I am lead to wonder about the purity of mathematics on another scale.

good piece, Aaron.

Peter


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.178.---)
Date: February 07, 2010 12:04AM

Bravissimo, aaron! I find this to be particularly excellent.

Mary


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 07, 2010 07:12AM

Well done, Aaron. The human spirit is what makes life so wonderful. Technology and mathematics are useful but are no substitutes for humanity.

Joe


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: aaron (24.22.31.---)
Date: February 07, 2010 06:14PM

Thank you Peter, Mary, joe, for you comments.

This poem came out of many attempts at writing songs. Some using a mathematical approach, which is not really wrong, and produces a very nice and clean song. It just lacks any real emotion, which good music must have.

The answer, like most things is somewhere in the middle.

Cheers,

aaron


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: February 09, 2010 07:23PM

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Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: February 09, 2010 07:23PM

Aaron, I feel the same way about computer generated music. It simply doesn't have that analog mystery, which some people call "soul" or feeling. A fine read here.

Les


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.178.---)
Date: February 17, 2010 12:17AM

But this song, perfect on a page
could not make a boy fall in love
with Rosalita, as she dangles from a cliff

Losing her grip each time the sax
dissolves the refrain
into one more chance
to reach for her hand


Most often people comment on someone's ability to say much in few words, but with this poem, I'm amazed by how two stanzas can pack such a punch.

Mary


Re: Mathematics Could Write a Song
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: August 14, 2011 01:16AM

bump for the golden mean and the golden proportion. May Pythagoras never fail.




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