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Last Stop
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 01, 2010 06:17PM

Last Stop

TARP:
Nothing left to doubt about
Who is running the country.
Paul Winchell is dead;
Doodeyville is laid to ruins;
Lassie won't be coming home today and
The road to Walton Mountain has been closed.
Father may know best, but
Altruism is no match for greed.

Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 02/28/2010 07:56PM by hpesoj.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: les712 (66.189.173.---)
Date: February 02, 2010 02:21AM

Great closing line, Joe, and a pretty apt description of who we as a nation have become.

Les


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 02, 2010 03:26AM

It is up to us to change this, though, isn't it? I like the poem, Joseph.

Peter


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 02, 2010 06:18PM

Les:

I'm not sure how "poetic" the last line is, but I am glad you liked it. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Peter:

It is up to us to change it and each of us can make a difference in our own worlds; but the difference is so small in comparison to the problem, that it really won't have much of an impact. That's pessimistic, I know, but I'm becoming overwhelmed by the complete lack of regard for individual desires and needs shown by banks and big business.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Joe

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 02/02/2010 06:19PM by hpesoj.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: February 03, 2010 10:32PM

Hey Joe,

I'm a firm believer in horizons and threshholds...that is, that in critical timesasmall difference can have enormous consequences, regardless of the odd. This happens in both positive and negatives ways, so I don't think it unwarranted optimism, just a part of the unpredictability of what comes next.

amo,

Peter


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 04, 2010 09:05PM

Yeah, Peter, I now know what you mean. My 14 month-old granddaughter ran into my arms today and said "I love you Papa Joe" for the first time. Funny how my pessimism vanished at that exact moment. Thanks for the advice.

Joe

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 02/28/2010 12:43PM by hpesoj.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: February 28, 2010 07:56PM

I've modified the original at the urging of a friend who suggested that I "flesh out" the poem a bit more. I'm not sure it was worth the effort because I wasn't overly fond of it from the start. It was just something that more or less wrote itself while I was in one of my more cynical moods. At any rate, here it is along with the original.

Joe

Last Stop (Revised)

AIG
BOA
PNB
TARP:
No doubt now about who's in charge.
The innocence of the 50s is gone
Tarnish stains the Golden Rule
Paul Winchell is dead;
Doodeyville is laid to ruins;
Lassie won't be coming home today and
The road to Walton Mountain is now closed.
Father may have known best, but
Altruism is no match for greed.



Last Stop (Original)

TARP:
Nothing left to doubt about
Who is running the country.
Paul Winchell is dead;
Doodeyville is laid to ruins;
Lassie won't be coming home today and
The road to Walton Mountain has been closed.
Father may know best, but
Altruism is no match for greed.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: mg (64.12.116.---)
Date: March 01, 2010 05:00PM

Great poem. I love the last line.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.243.---)
Date: March 04, 2010 05:30PM

Thanks mg.


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: August 14, 2011 01:39AM

seems even more apropos than when it was first posted, Joe.

Peter


Re: Last Stop
Posted by: les712 (68.189.77.---)
Date: August 15, 2011 11:58AM

I concur Peter, though it's probably been true since Teddy was in office.

Les




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