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Strange Notes
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: August 02, 2009 03:41AM

Strange Notes

cold egg breakfast
antiwar songs
pathos down on the hill

strange pains
strange places
burning forearms

a day late
and a dollar short

Today I visited ...
after I sorted ...
a bag of ...
I forget where it is

I canít remember the light --
Moon took me by surprise.
I hear the chord strike slow vision,
Beneath the hum of the day.
I will make it another day
Through the epiphany of the ordinary.

ď... on the scene.
What's good or bad doesn't matter to me;
what does matter is feeling and not feeling.
... You've got to know much more
than just the technicalities of notes;
you've got to know
what goes between the notes. ď

Jimi Hendrix

Between the notes
The lights went on
Went off

That wind is
Blowing in my heart

I canít hear the dark

Edited 2 time(s). Last edit at 08/02/2009 03:43AM by petersz.

Re: Strange Notes
Posted by: les712 (68.185.67.---)
Date: August 02, 2009 04:36AM

This is an interesting piece, Peter. Nature/God sometimes reminds us of our mortality and our inherent tendencies to not see the whole picture.

What I take from this is that the world is infinite, we are finite and what lies between the notes defines the rest.

By the way I did read your other poem, but I don't really know what to say about it.


Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 08/02/2009 04:01PM by les712.

Re: Strange Notes
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: August 02, 2009 03:44PM

That's cool. That's always alright, to not know what to say about something. Thanks for acknowledging it, though, Les. I like what your take is on this one, also. Some days, I'm just struggling with my human thing, watching guitar music or not.



Re: Strange Notes
Posted by: Gouwerijns (77.169.41.---)
Date: August 24, 2009 02:02AM

wonderfull read peter
hugs Gouwe


My moto's Those who ask question shall know answers.:>>> wie vraagt wie weet. Those who darenot ask shall never know. ::>>> wie niet vraagt wie niet weet.

Re: Strange Notes
Posted by: petersz (24.7.60.---)
Date: August 25, 2009 02:05AM

Thanks, Gouwe,


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